Teen Poetry #5 |
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Grrrrrr @ parents!!! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT ![]() |
Ok, this one doesn't have a title, and I know it's not one of my best. But I was really angry/sad when I wrote it, so I was concentrating more on expressing my emotions than making it into good poetry. K, so remember that before u read it... I know I’m not perfect, And don’t claim to be. Like every human being, I make mistakes to a certain degree. I am the poster child, For parents everywhere. I don’t drink or do drugs, And my grades are way up there. I’m polite and refined, Always perky and sweet. Don’t hang with the wrong crowd, Don’t make promises I can’t keep. With so many temptations, And pressure to be like “them”, I sometimes fear I’ll crumble, And that my beliefs will cave in. But my morals always win, Because I strive to make you see, That even though I’m not perfect, I’m a lot more than “they”’ll ever be. Yet still I’m punished for such trivial things, When I could be doing worse. And you fail to praise me for the good I do, Which sometimes really hurts. I may never live up to your standards, Though you fail to notice how hard I try. In reality, I will never be perfect, But at least I’m not a knocked-up runaway. ![]() *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
You know you and I really need to form a club. ![]() Nice work and *hugs* Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Your poem seemed to be so realistic and personal even if you were upset when you wrote it. I can relate to it. I thought you did a good job with expressing your opinion. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I really like the way you expressed your feelings here. Lots of good points for this mom to keep in mind ![]() ![]() |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
OMG!!!! you and i are exactly alike! i can relate so well to this poem! grrrrrr @ parents LOL!...how about that club eh? nice write...i enjoyed it loads! |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I think they make every parent take this one class that makes them make us feel like this oO; I know I related as well, and I'm glad you let yourself vent all this out. ![]() ~Carly Speak softly and carry a beagle. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I think i'm one of "them", but i liked this post anyway. you put a lot of emotion into this Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Carly~ parents aren't given any classes. We just try to do the best we can...we try not to do the things our parents did to us, and we look at what we did as kids and try to help our kids avoid those mistakes. It's really hard. I want so much to be my kids' best friend, but I have to draw a line sometimes. Some days I'm super mom and my kids tell me I rock...then there are the days when I am just feeling like a failure. Parenting is no small task LOL I work 24/7 and rarely do I get a day off. Cut your folks some slack ![]() ![]() ![]() I pray every day my kids won't be like I was LOL I find myself calling my parents up and saying I'm so sorry for doing such and such....and they laugh and ask which one did it....all in all, I couldn't ask for better kids. I'm sure all of your parents feel the same. ![]() |
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Yoda Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 19 |
This is a painful situation to be in, as you have said in your poem. It sometimes teaches people to not care because it hurts too much to care. I'm trying to help my brother through it because it's really hurting him deeply. Just hang in there. Parents aren't perfect either and all they want is for you to be the best you can be. The only problem is they don't always see things the way you do. So you need to speak up. When I told my dad basicly everything you said in your poem he realized what they were doing and they've eased up. You might want to try it. Well anywho, thanks for posting. I enjoyed the poem a lot. ![]() You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
Well ya know Nikki....that one was really good. believe it or not is was alot happier than most of your poems usually are. nobody is perfect and you have plenty of friends that love you just the way you are!! ~heather~ |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey thank u 2 everyone who responded!!! ![]() Jenn and Cherish and anyone else who can relate massively~ We definitely should start a club lol!!! I wanna be president! ![]() SEA~I definitely understand that parenting isn't neccesarily easy. I'm the oldest of 4 children, so I know my mom is sorta "testing" things out on me. She's not a pro and shes not perfect, and I know that. It's just that it feels like I'm trying so hard 2 prove 2 her that I want 2 make her happy, yet it's amounting to nothing. It just helps to feel appreciated once in a while and, when you're not, it's frusturating...This piece was pretty much just venting, but thanks 2 everyone who read it!!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
Wow!! I loved this. I think that you should do your best and they should exept it. GREAT poem!! Da kaka be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
I liked the poem. But, sadly, I cant relate to you. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Beautiful work. A very well done spill of emotions. I really like the rhyme scheme, the flow was nice. My suggestion to you is whenever you write something, spur of the moment just to vent, go back and read it later. It's fun just to fix things up. This is a very well done piece. In a way, I can relate with you. It gets tiring being the one adults admire, and the one that peers look down on. But you'll go far. And that makes it all very worth it. Nicely done! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Nikki, Great write! You're becoming really, very good. It's fun to watch. Thanks for posting. I enjoy every read. ![]() Sincerely, Titus Love me for Rhon loves me. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
It most be hard for you to deal with your parents but you expressed your feelings well in this poem.And I think it's cool that you stilll have morals and don't do drugs or drink it must take a lot not to.But anyway I loved this piece and I can't wait to read more keep up the awsome work. LAuren |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Whoa..lol the end of the poem took a sudden twist and kinda shocked me..but i liked what you were saying...i enjoyed this a lot...and im glad your not a knocked-up runaway! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is eloquently said parents, what can I say we'll be one ourselves in the future thats for sure are we gonna act the same way? you never know ![]() thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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