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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Okay, this one isn't really one of my favourites...but I'll post it all because I wrote this one during Science 20S class when Mr.Margison was going over the periodic table... Peaceful Dagger- What is love? Love is an infectious lie, It shows no mercy... torturing me with ever lasting pain... What is pain? Pain is always present, Soothing my guilty soul. Putting my mind and body at war. What is war? War is love, life and happiness... What are they good for? Nothing... It is merely a master of the dagger. What is the dagger? A dagger is what has been stuck into my back. A dagger is what I run along my arms... But none of this hurts more, than the one in my heart... ------------- This is probably one of my worst...but it's pretty good for science class. Oh to cruel, cruel life and this sick, dirty world...and yeah, the name doesn't really suite the poem---but oh well...who cares right? "Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..." [This message has been edited by Android 17 (edited 11-27-2001).] |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Interesting piece. I liked it, keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
A dagger is what has been stuck into my back. A dagger is what I run along my arms... But none of this hurts more, than the one in my heart... That part was my favorite part and I think the best part. Maybe because I relate to it, maybe because it's carrying a lot with it... who knows. I just like it. Thanks for sharing. Fearlessness isn't living without fear, fearlessness is being afraid and still living. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I don't know why you think that this one is one of your worst, because I really liked it. Then again, I haven't read much of your other work, but if this is considered a "bad" one, then apparently I'm gonna hafta read the "good" ones!! I thought you wrote this so well, and I liked the way you started each new stanza explaining the last word in the one before. Awesome work!   *~Nikki*~ *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Yoda Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 19 |
If that's one of your worst, then I definitely want to read the rest. Shame on you for insulting such a good poem. Life, beauty, truth, and experience are all just words... and when described in a poem.. through the heart and soul... it becomes a masterpiece.  Thanks for sharing this with us. I really enjoyed reading it.  You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hmmm...although the normal people didn't reply---I really appreciate some newer poeple showing up! Thanks you guys! I'll be sure to check out your work! I think my best would be "Dreams of a Small Boy" because all of my feelings are in it! Yet again...thanks y'all! "Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..." |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwwwwwwwwwww.....*pulls the dagger out*...i hate knowing you feel this way  ....i like this one a lot. i think you did a very good job on it. the only objection i have is that its so sad. i really do hope you fell better kiddo..*hugs*...keep writing..  |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
It's nice knowing that people care! "Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked the format of this a lot, it made it a very interesting read. certainly not a bad poem, i think you did well with this. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
Are you sure this was one of your badest? i loved it please keep it up ~! muah~! *!~!* Andrea *!~!* |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
I'll try to...but everything I try---ends up being lost in the end... "Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is not bad at all It is definitely written in a different style I thought it was a good write thanks for sharing and keep it up là où est mon amour? |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
WWWWWWWOoooooooooooooooooooooooWWWWWWWW!! I liked this a LOT! A completely AWESOME WRITE! I dunno why i liked it so much- i just did! This was stupendous! -Dreys p.s. this one is in the library for sure |
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