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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida 
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When I want a hug.. Where are you? When I want a kiss.. Where are you? When I need a shoulder to lean on.. Where are you? We never see each other anymore Only a constant hello and good-bye A simple kiss can please you The simple words “I love you” please you But, When I really need you, You are never there To hold me, to tell me How much you love me It hurts me more knowing you can’t be with me Because of some other force, Pulling us apart We hate this so much But nothing will pull us apart We have our love Our love will keep us together Forever Our love is a never ending cycle It keeps going and going Until we are pulled apart And then the next time I see you My love for you is stronger "Water Over Matter" [This message has been edited by Lisa_bebe15 (edited 11-27-2001).] |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Another good work. I liked it, very emotional and again I understood it. My AIM name is ChelFSU19. Whenever you want to chat. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Hmm... long distance relationship? That's got from it anyway... related somewhat to how things are between me and my boyfriend. He lives in North Carolina and I live in Maryland. We've been lucky enough to spend a lot of time together, but it's still difficult. If that's what you're going through... hang in there. It's worth it if it's real. Good poem.. thanks for posting.  Fearlessness isn't living without fear, fearlessness is being afraid and still living. |
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Yoda Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 19 |
I liked it a lot. You spoke of a side of some relationships that not too many people touch on. Mostly because it's hard to describe. You did it very, very well. Thanks.  You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very pwerful poem filled with a lot of emotion it is a very well written piece.I hope everything gets better for you and your relationship stays strong.But anyway I love this poem and keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a powerful poem, Lisa. I understand what you're saying, but then again... most of the time love doesn't last forever. It's an unfortunate occurance of most relationships. *hugs* I'm sorry you're being hurt, though. No one deserves that... I enjoyed the piece. It's well written, and I look forward to reading more. Good job. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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