Teen Poetry #5 |
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Blindfolds (Paused Things) |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Blindfolds (Paused Things) I scream and blind death blindfolds give me a head start I run, slide and fall flat Three seconds abandoned me, Still I'm within death's reach My skin escapes from me Deep in it craves for thee Later events die for you and I scream for I don't know you Blindfolds at my grave Slaying my love decayed Briefing the troops for war Sending their breath so far Escaping an Awakened Dream Scrolling ways of broken paths Shifted Kings, paused things, Tie this knouts for the mind is to weak and blinded to dream. -C.M. "I feel the sting of an insignificant wasp, and yet, I fear that I am alergic" |
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K. Rebel Junior Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 40San Juan, PR |
Well Carlos, this poem just makes me want to cry and laugh at the same time because of part of what it was about, (just in case, part of it is about a really bad experience we had in a car accident the other day). Anyways a great poem, a great way to express this things that are going on man. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was amazing! thats all i can say boxer boy yellow ********* Regina |
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Yoda Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 19 |
I got a message from it, but I doubt it's what you intended. Doesn't really matter though. You still wrote a really good poem, and I still enjoyed it. So it's all good. ![]() ![]() You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I can't figure out what you mean at all....I like the way you worded it though...sorry, I don't always get this kind of poetry....maybe you wouldn't mind elaborating on its meaning for me??? ![]() |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im not even shur what to say about this...i got so many mixed feelings while reading it. I couldn decide wether its a sad poem..or if it was provoking or humorous in a way...im so confused!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ok ok...im reading and replying c! i read that poem...and i read it over again and again and again.... and i read what danny wrote...and still didnt understand half of the symbols you used. *cough*explaination*ahem*please*cough* i loved the way you wrote it though...the confusion of the piece added to the "blindfolded" effect. i liked the read loads- ill be back for the explaination buddy....keep writing.. ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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