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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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They sentenced larry to death on Tuesday, I'm glad but I don't know why. But he killed one of my friends, and I think he'll get what he deserves. I hung out with you on Tuesday, I had a stomach ache from 11:00 to 12:00, but I never wondered why, and you sat with me. We played Basketball on tuesday, for the first time in our lives, and you won (of course), but I'll get you next time. Donna kept on telling me, to go back to her house, and leave you at Ronald's, but I didn't want to, so I didn't. Tuesday was a mixed emotion day, because I was dazed when standing next to you, and upset before the judge declared the sentence, because I don't know what I'd do if they let him off. Tuesdays are usually bad days though. Jesica died on a Tuesday, the sentencing was on a tuesday, and I thought they'd just give him life in prison. I felt bad a while back, because on Monday when it was the 18th, you came over and I had fun, and it was the day her mom and her bro's mom died. Tuesdays can be good days. Tuesdays can be bad days. I've got proof of that. But any Tuesday w/ you is a good day. I know it's stupid, but oh well I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
letting your emotions out is never stupid! Don't say things like that......I thought this was great  hugs to you.... SEA |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
What's stupid? The poem? The poem was great. It kept me interested througout. The first stanza kinda threw me off a little, though. You have there: "I'm glad but I don't know why./But he killed one of my friends,/and I think he'll get what he deserves." You answered why you're glad in the last line. Just something I picked up.. THis poem is well written. Nice work, Allysa --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I didn't think it was stupid at all. It was a good poem. I liked it! - Cody - |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
This wasn't stupid, Silly. I really liked it. More I say! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
stupid?!...nah..this was filled with emotions...i liked it. im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks for telling me that this isn't stupid. It's a combination of love and hate. It talks about Justin, but it also talks about larry and all that. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh wow, this was very good. This was completely so not stupid! how could you say that? geesh! VERY nice......I understood the comparison of a love/hate thing about tuesdays. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey Allysa, expressing what you feel and think within in writing is never stupid. Remember that. I actually liked it a lot. It's like reading your diary  lol j/kclose enough keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
interesting.... very interesting...all your emotions mixed well in this one sis! *hugz* "Like, yeah."-the famous cheerleaders |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
It wasn't stupid....but good. **Sarah  |
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