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AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

0 posted 2001-11-21 08:43 PM

The ice cold feel
in words of flame,
bring forth guilt
in a sense of shame.

A piercing touch
from a rose's thorn,
a ghostly expression
that you adorn.

The mocking trust
programmed to decieve,
in ways the mind
could not conceive.

Unattainable dreams
with a sense of real,
touches a numb heart
with pain it can feel.

A silent scream
takes its claim,
its eerie echo
glorifies its fame.

A tempting call
lures the unsuspecting,
while convincing them
to stay unobjecting.

Madness unravels
to reviel your heart,
harsh as it seems
when lies are apart.

~Ali

Okay, I know this one doesn't make too much sense, but it was written on a flood of emotion on a situation that is hidden deep within. So forgive me if this is... rocky. Thank you for reading!

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. J'ai t'adore. Je t'aime.

Alyssa

Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

1 posted 2001-11-21 09:45 PM

i liked this acutally
nice job!

I LuV 2 fReAk out saLEpeEpZ. ThEy AsK me If tHey CaN heLp Me, & I sAy,'HaVe U gOT NEthINg Id like?'TheN thEy aSk mE wuT sIZe I sAy "X-tr MedIuM"

gymnast
Member

since 2001-11-18

Posts 80
Scotland.

2 posted 2001-11-22 05:10 PM

Hey! I really liked this poem! Your emtion does show through! Keep it up!
Luv ~Amanda~

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

3 posted 2001-11-22 08:42 PM

*frowns* a good poem...but what's it about kiddo? E-mail me okay?

-Adam

"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

4 posted 2001-11-23 03:17 AM

Your emotion really shows through in your poem I lvoe it keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

5 posted 2001-11-23 10:38 AM

I don't think this was "rocky" at all. It's really good, and I especially like the rthymn and the flow of it. Nice work, and I hope that you feel better!!

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-11-28 12:34 PM

hmmm, seems like you got some turmoil goin gon in your personal life lately.
Hope things get better
Thanks for the wonderful read

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2001-12-26 02:30 PM

AngelPoet87-
This is a VERY well-written display of emotion.
I felt every word as I read.
I do hope things are going better for you now.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-12-26 03:39 PM

"A piercing touch
from a rose's thorn,
a ghostly expression
that you adorn."

This is beautiful! I'm impressed at the power of the emotions going throughout the piece. Very well done!

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-12-26 08:24 PM

Nicely done!!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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