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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... 
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Dreams are what we make them. Some might say, “Ahem! ‘Tis not true! I don’t wish to be cruel, but dreams are merely dreams!” Go climb a tree- I soundly disagree! If a dream is a dream, then what of the King? If one gets anywhere in life, fights through the daily strife, it’s because one dreamed, one dared to get creamed! Without dreams, we would be nowhere, a society that didn’t care. To me, that’s a mighty scare! If no dreams, what of color? Innovation? The ability to hover? One could go on, risk being redundant; just trust me friend: If one dreams, in the end, the world will owe that dreamer a mighty debt of gratitude. Dreams are the porthole to a world of beauty... Daniel Redding 11/11-19/01 |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
True, Titus, very true. Very well done. Library piece indeed. ~Love Rhon for she is as good as Zu... Yeah, that sounds right...err all hail Zu and Rhon~ |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I like dreams too. Dawn |
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~gretchenp34~ Junior Member
since 2001-10-08
Posts 46Ohio, USA |
well this is what i say: success always starts with a dream. well done  Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart. |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
i really liked this poem.. but then again im starting to have a lil thing for your work very good and all i can say .. is .. what is your dream?? *!~!* Andrea *!~!* |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Lol, well Titus...this, I think is the first work of yours that I've ever read. Now I feel bad for not reading any other work of yours...I think I'll search up your UserName and read stuff of yours from the past that I've missed! Man, this is good! Lol, I can tell that you wrote it...it has your---your essence...your style! Y'know? And sadly...well, it's very hard for me to dream. If you read "Dreams of a Small Boy" (by me) then you'll understand abit more...I say it's my most heartfelt poem... "Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..." |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Dreams are what you make of them but I really ove this poem keep up the great work. Lauren |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey, nice job!! It's soo important to dream. Dreams are what keep you going when you have nothing else. Nice work!!  ~*Nikki*~ *~Fighting for your love~* |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
a dream is but a dream intil it becomes reality! titus is mine and mine only!!! *glares at rhonda* |
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gymnast Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 80Scotland. |
Hey, Just thought I'd write and say that I thought this poem was awesome! I'm a daydreamer so really can relate to this poem! Luv~n~Hugz Amanda  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
There is nothing wrong with dreaming as long as we keep ourselves still on reality. Dreams are goals that we pursue, and without them, how can we better ourselves. Beautiful poem once again. thanks for sharing and keep em coming. là où est mon amour? donde está mi amour? wo ist meine Liebe? [This message has been edited by acire (edited 12-01-2001).] |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
acire stop pretending to sound smart lol!! i love this poem hun it's great!! titus is mine and mine only!!! *glares at rhonda* |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Daniel/Poetryislife: I believe this is the first poem I've read by you...I think. o_O; My memory isn't too good...that's what happens when you get old. Not that I'm old...Uhm. Hmph. *boil* Anywho- I thought the "ahem" was cute in the first stanza. That grabbed my attention to the rest of the diologue. Maybe that's just because my attention span is all over the place right now...o_O; The second stanza, I wasn't too sure what you were trying to say. Maybe you could reword it? Third stanza- I thought it was very kawaii. ^_^ Especially the last two lines. As well, the message was great. Fifth stanza- you had some really good rhyming going on. ^^; Esp. "color" and "hover". The last line was awesome. Pure genius. I'd have to agree with you on that one. Just...wow. Awesomeness. On a general/evil-poet-mode note: I found the meter a bit iffy at times. It's not a major thing, but if the meter was changed in a few places, the poem would flow better. Just as a side note. ^^; Thanks for the read! ^_^ ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i like the tone of this piece, it kept everything light hearted and kept the reader very engaged. god job with this. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This piece was awesome!! Kinda reminded me a lil of a Dr.Seuss short story or somethin in they way you worded the poem..hehe i liked this mucho! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Thank's all! You rule! Titus |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hmmm... Nice write... You have a fresh tone when you write, I'm becoming a bit fond of it actually. "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Thanks.[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (12-26-2001 01:17 PM).] |
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