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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... 
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Not many know, Not many have seen What I know, What i’ve seen 9/29/01 & 10/9/01 |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
that was really interesting... though i think you should make it longer, id love to see it as a long piece... ALLIE |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
I'd have to think about that. Some poems are best short and sweet, to the point. I felt this one was best like that. But I'll think about your suggestion! Thanks  Sincerely, Titus "....this time I was mistaken for handing you a heart worth breaking." Nickelback |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Titus, this one is deep. It makes you sound wise  Seriously, though, I like this one, it made me think. Good write!~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
wow...that was so simple, but so meaningful! ~*~Priscilla~*~ You Can Fall From The Sky, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very short, very sweet and very true ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
very short and very true. titus is mine and mine only!!! *glares at rhonda* |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Short, but very powerful. Great job. Dawn |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
i hated it absolutly hated it LOL im jokin but it is short yuh know.. If at first you don't succeed, destroy all evidence that you tried. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Nice job. The problem with writing short poetry,in my opinion, is you have to find the EXACT right words to fit the poem. You know what I'm saying? Good job here |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
hey babe~! that was deep i really liked it please keep writing~!!! *!~!* Andrea *!~!* |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hey!...this is good!...short and to the point. sometimes you just have to speak your mind. enjoyed it heaps danniti |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this had a nice feeling to it, its hard to make something meanining ful out of four lines, but you did a good job. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Titus- Short and sweet, and makes a statement. I like it! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a powerful piece in it's simplicity. As Peter said, it's hard to make a piece powerful, or good, for that matter, in 4 lines, but you did a fine job. I hope to see more soon! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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