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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
With every line I read in your eyes the more I'm lost for words. And every time your eyes smile I'm breathless and speechless I'm shwipped right of my feet... Don't know the poet but you are a work of art. Can't get over it you're more than straight from the heart... Chapter after chapter, perfect 10's I don't know where to start. And could we be much more then friends with heat and passion you know I can't resict... Don't know the author but you're a work of art. Can't find any words you're more than straight from the heart. Beautiful you are, like a big screen movie star. miss univers, who knows but to me you'll always be beautiful.. you're a work of art. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Hallucination, Your piece here was truly beautiful. Dawn |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Nice nice... its good to give others admiration as you seem to do... we need more people like that... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was amazing! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
wow that poem was amazing and who ever you wrote that for is lucky if i might be so noesy as to ask who you might have written if for from me as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow, i REALLY liked this, i could relate so well! it almost brought tears 2 my eyes, thats how well i could relate 2 it....awesum write !  ~pain for pleasure, satan is his name~ SUM41 |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was good...not your best. but still good. "work of art", would she still be a work of art, if she wasnt beautiful like a movie star or miss universe...sorry. It would have been nice if there was more of her character. if there was and i missed it. sorry. keep writing Regina |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
very nice piece....i liked the repeated phrase and idea of comparing the person to a poet or the written word. it's very sweet as well i must say  Salma |
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