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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
He traces his finger upon the wooden frame Over edge, over curve, Over intricate designs. He follows with his eyes inside Each breath, each sound, Each thought... Divine. In dreams he saw horizons touch Where sky and ocean bring forth the earth A fire sparked within his eyes Of love, of hate, of sin and Mirth. The sand he holds within his hands Are moulded gently, carressed fine He made the world, the stars, the moon And in likeness, us... A soul divine. + + + + + One of my...*cough* shorter poems. ^_^ At first, I was going to write about a child. But you know...thoughts change. Consider this an indirect symbolism. ^^; I'm growing lazier by the day, so you people will have to tell me if it's any good. I may post another poem at the end of the week, if I can muster any more thoughts...thinking is so HARD! >_< ...and it hurts. o_O; ++ Leah ++ [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 11-17-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i que sorprende LOVEd el tono imaginario dreamy del poema... escrito muy bien y hermoso como siempre. también, tengo gusto de cómo usted hizo el simbolismo y la fraseología y el formato a través del guardapolvo... leyeron muy agradablemente. LEAH más hai? HAI! =) |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
um.. I don't know spanish that well so I'll just tell you that I love your poem in english.Keep up the great work. Lauren |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
*blinks*....albertas talking another lanuage and is making me jealous  hey leah *pulls leah to the side*...i dont know where you get those silly little ideas of yours....this is really good! ..i love the way you wrote it it gave the whole piece a sense of ease- exactly what i associate divinity with. good poem leah and dont you say otherwise! keep writing, poet... |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
I second that foreign mumbo jumbo..or at least what I caught of it...it's beautiful and it read really well. I like the tranquil feeling of it and the whole beach theme goin on...the sand the horizon, and the beginning where I pictured (the speaker) running his hands over a wooden ship. Good job@ Go ahead, push your luck; find out how much love the world can hold |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Wow, Leah...this one makes me think! I don't know about what...but I'm lost in some sort of trance. After I post this I'm gonna sit here in the computer lab and drool all over the keyboard. *gurgle gurgle* "To be forgotten is much worse than death!" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i would never hate any of your poems are you kidding me, they are all awesome keep it up girl là où est mon amour? |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
beautiful post...wow...i'm speechless  Salma |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
yo! english please? no se espanol! wait wait its um...no habla espanol! hehe anyways I LOVE THIS POEM!!! *click click* library! I LuV 2 fReAk out saLEpeEpZ. ThEy AsK me If tHey CaN heLp Me, & I sAy,'HaVe U gOT NEthINg Id like?'TheN thEy aSk mE wuT sIZe I sAy "X-tr MedIuM" |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Leah You Rock! This is great, as always! Can't wait to hear more from you. Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. J'ai t'adore. Je t'aime. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I didn't like this as much as your others. Although the imagery still rocked and the symbolism was there, I didn't feel anything for it like for all your others. Nonetheless, you stil write well and more than likely always will. I don't hate your poetry, I hate you.  ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
i'll just say "very very nice"  |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Short poem, long poem, anywhere in between i always love reading your poetry Thanks for sharing..it was a great read!ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Beautiful images you expressed here, Leah. Again, a very well-written poem. The symbolism was amazing, and the language rocked. Awesome work!! MUA! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i liked this poem a lot! great work! signature--> repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! [This message has been edited by poeticgirl01 (12-28-2001 03:04 AM).] |
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Autumn Child New Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 5 |
I think your poem is beautiful!!!!I hope you write more like it "Great things are done, when men and mountains meet." ~William Blake |
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