Teen Poetry #5 |
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home? i guess i dunno |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
ok yeah this really isnt that good i could probaby do a lot better but this is how i feel right now and i kinda have writers block still so yeah here it is.... Walking down this street It has become dark and cold I’m not sure where I’m going Maybe home This pain has become so intense It’s useless Like me The scars on my soul I now wear on my flesh Untold stories Of unknown pain My heart is bleeding My emotions become numb I can’t feel love or hate I’m not sad or happy I’m Just me I have no hopes or dreams I just want to be home story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i thouch i ruin. Im midas in reverse |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"My heart is bleeding My emotions become numb I can’t feel love or hate I’m not sad or happy I’m Just me" I loved that part. I can relate so much to that. Excellent write Kat. ![]() [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-05-2001).] |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I really liked it that was good and I know what you mean there well just from talking to you basically anyways, I'll talk to you later hey and chin up. I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
It was a good poem dont get me wrong but i get a negitive vibe off it somehow and i was wondering if there was much feeling in this as i thought or is it just something that came up? well nice poem. |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work DAOTS, I really enjoyed the read although I did feel that this was not as good as others that I have read from you, but still a very good read. ![]() Andrew "Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol |
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Brad Majors![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Nice piece! |
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JBaker515![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
ya this was nice........ |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This pain has become so intense It’s useless Like me The scars on my soul I now wear on my flesh Untold stories Of unknown pain These lines were great. I hope that you are using the scars symbolically. This was a wonderful poem, especially for a person w/ writers block. We should open a hospital around here for writers block... *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*sighs*...this hit home for me...and hit me hard...so much i realted to...i loved the poem ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
This was a very strong and original poem. I liked it very much especially the part which Spice pointed out. Keep writing! ![]() ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"The scars on my soul I now wear on my flesh Untold stories Of unknown pain" Wow.. this really hit home - hard. Wonderful work, here. I really enjoyed this, DAOTS. Keep posting all your work. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was fine.....not my favorite from you, but it was still an emotional write which I did like. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
this was good. I think I'll put it in my library. It's like.. It's not that long, but yet it says it all.. I cant explain it, but I liked it very much. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
This was good, i could relate. I liked this. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
It’s useless Like me The scars on my soul I now wear on my flesh Untold stories Of unknown pain Those were my favorite lines. I could relate. it hit me hard. Awesome poem. Regina |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You have written this poem really well. Don't we all just wanna find home? Hope you find it ![]() hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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