Teen Poetry #5 |
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Love Should Be A Crime |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
Hey everyone!! It's not one of my best but I had to get this out somehow. Tell me what you think ![]() He approaches you as a friend With you he jokes around, And then one day he tells you That your hearts are forever bound. He springs this news upon you And you are left in shock, Your confused on what to do Because your boat he's rocked. Then one night he appears And his lips meet yours, Now he says he's feelings have changed And that he likes you even more. But just as you open up And you give your heart away, He decides to change his mind And now he doesn't want to stay Now you are hurt and frustraighted On why he said those things, Why his mind has changed And all the confusion that he brings. He asks you in a note If he has wasted his time, Since when did I become a waste?? His love should be a crime. Now he reilises that your hurt And once again he'll change his mind, He claims he likes you even more now Now he wants to be kind. But what will he feel later? In two days, a month or a week, Will he still be around? Or will he be kissing someone elses cheek. It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Ah yes, the classic chaotic boyfriend situation. Gotta love it, no matter how hard you try not to. As for the poem, it wasn't as bad as you made it out to be. It's good to get these things out. ![]() Theo |
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DawnG![]() ![]()
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
This is very good. Thanks for sharing. Dawn |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oi. Well, I hear ya. ![]() Sometimes love sucks...and boys suck, too. They should be locked up for a bit with big birtha mwhahaha! ![]() this was good though and I hope your stich gets better. ![]() Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sad things MEN-(minus)alby(ME), do...huh? "But what will he feel later? In two days, a month or a week, Will he still be around? Or will he be kissing someone elses cheek." this is real as well...so many take hearts as plastic spoons(bad camparion, i know) but yea...hope all will get better, and one perfect guy you'll meet. =) |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Yeah love should definitely be illegal, considering the pain you always end up feeling in the end is worse than any punishment. And the guys that cause this kinda pain should be locked up 4ever!!! I liked this one alot, and I think you did a really nice job. There are a couple spots that don't flow quite right, but that could easily be fixed. Good luck! ![]() ~Nikki*~ ~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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