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Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2001-11-07 08:04 PM

How long have I been sitting here?
Time always slows so you can see it
No matter how you try to free it
From the clutches of your mind

I never thought that I would fear
The passing days and what they’d tell me
Of my friends that now dispel me
Quickly leaving me behind

Who needs them, I will be strong
My family never raised a quitter
And I wont be the first one bitter
From the shoulders of cold friends

I never said I wasn’t wrong
But still two never did one right
And in the time of just one night
They showed me how our story ends

Knight of Secrecy
Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 113
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-11-07 08:21 PM

How long have I been sitting here?
Time always slows so you can see it
No matter how you try to free it
From the clutches of your mind"

WOW. From the first line you caught my entire attention. This is great.

I never said I wasn’t wrong
But still two never did one right
And in the time of just one night
They showed me how our story ends

VERY nice poem! I can relate to this poem very much. Very Well Done.

-C.M.

[This message has been edited by Knight of Secrecy (edited 11-08-2001).]

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-11-07 08:25 PM

Good work with rhymes! It was really interesting in this poem. I like the beginning a lot too, it made for a good introduction.

Theo

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

3 posted 2001-11-07 08:31 PM

Very well written poem I really like it keep up the great work.
Lauren

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

4 posted 2001-11-07 10:56 PM

I too can relate to this poem

Dawn

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

5 posted 2001-11-08 10:32 AM

I really liked how you wrote this. It was great.

BTW nice pic you lil cutie

Post more for us, we never get to see you around anymore.

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

6 posted 2001-11-09 07:45 PM

I definitely liked this alot!! Great work!! You sound like a very emotionally strong person, and that's a good quality to have.

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~

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