Teen Poetry #5 |
My Life |
CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Hello. This one I wrote last night... I was thinking about life and how crazy it is that people seem to think that I have everything so great in my life. Anywho, let me know what you think. It's certainly not my best. MY LIFE People always say that they Envy the life that I live Seeming to b free of hurt and pain A helping hand I have to give Yet they never realize the reason That my life has such simplicity I have very little going on How lifeless my life can be I wish my life had less "perfection" Perhaps that would add excitement If you still want my life, I'll trade And I'll give you my incitement - Cody - |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This was a refreshment. You said something not often expressed, it is daring to mention one's own simple state of life. Most people would argue that they have plenty of problems, however you seem not only aware of your well-being, but subtly annoyed by it. Cheers. Theo |
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just_me Junior Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 19 |
i like the way you wrote this. short, but to the point, getting it across... |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
CwboyAtHeart, I know just how you are feeling here. I used to feel like I didn't have a life either. Recently I started working for some friends, and I finally after 26 years feel useful to somebody. I hope you can find some happiness soon. Dawn |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Dude! If you want some excitement, email me! I'll give you excitement! I'm so wierd... Great poem, Cody... No, not your absolute best, but still VERY good! ~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Don't listen to Rhonda she's nuts!! Anyway, I know EXACTLY how you feel. Unfortunatly I know both sides however, and excitement sometimes screws up everything. As they say, the grass is always greener on the other side.... Good write Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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