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Greeneyes7
Junior Member

since 2001-11-05

Posts 16
Illinois

0 posted 2001-11-05 07:02 PM

Walkin around confused
lost in this sea of chaos
this sea some call life
The certainty leaves like
waves receeding on the beach
Washing away all your plans
Everything you had set in life
The things you had worked for
Strived for each and every day
Lost in this turbulent ocean

I search for the familiar things
something to grasp to but
each new wave distorts it more
I don't understand what can I do?
I try to move but I am sinking
Sinking into the sand as waves leave
They leave me stuck surrounded
surrounded only by the unknowing
not knowing what life is to become.
With the crash of the wave
my life crumbles, too.
And what now? What am I to do?

Life is what you make it. Live each day as if it was your last.

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes7 (edited 11-05-2001).]

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-11-05 07:12 PM

This was nice. The final two lines rhymed, that was really good. Reminded me Shakespeare.
Good images.

[This message has been edited by Local Parasite (edited 11-05-2001).]

Poetof-the-night
Junior Member

since 2001-10-09

Posts 13

2 posted 2001-11-05 08:13 PM

Great poem, hope to see others like it.

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

3 posted 2001-11-06 12:07 PM

Greeneyes,

I liked this one a lot. Welcome to Passions. Look forward to reading more.

Dawn

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

4 posted 2001-11-06 12:59 PM

You somehow remind me of someone I know...I dont know quite how..but something in your writing makes me feel like I know you. This was very good. I liked it alot. Hope to see more of you!!
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

5 posted 2001-11-06 01:07 AM

Wow!! Wecome to Passions, and awesome first post! Can't wait to read more of your work!

~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!?

~Love me because I am Rhonda

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-11-28 05:05 AM

Awesome ending!!! I really liked the poem a lot. You wrote this really well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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