Teen Poetry #5 |
An Angel's Suffering |
AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
An Angel's Suffering Malevolent words piercing the very air you breathe, as people around you shout out and seethe. Such violent attacks on an innocent face, torment your compassion and disrupt your grace. Judgemental surroundings cage your potential, forcing you out into the unconfidential. Manipulating authorities convince to you conform, little are they aware you will never transform. Unappreciated deeds even for the undeserving, they abuse your kindness while you aren't observing. The painful labor they put you through, injures your body with rewards long overdue. Not a soul listens to the words you express, it all builds up inside causing more and more stress. They don't seem to care when you're not the faulted, its easier to blame you as the guilty are exalted. Your wings have been clipped and your soul has been caged, because of your perfection those around you are enraged. But your angelic smile still shines in the night, though only in your dreams will you take flight. One day will come and you will be free, instead of being trapped here next to me. ~Alicia~ Thanks for the help on this one, Adam, couldn't have done it without You. Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel. [This message has been edited by AngelPoet87 (edited 11-04-2001).] |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
This ish pure woo. You know I like it a lot Ali, even if I did help with lots of it. *snickers* Keep it up. -Adam "Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh well done Alicia, well done!!! Even if Adam helped you, it's very, very, very good!!! ~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
nice write keep smiling It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem. The first few stanzas I liked a lot. Keep it up -C.M. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
AMAZING JOB!!!!! IM SPEECHLESS!!!!!!!!!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
thanks guys |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
It's admirable to see you seeking improvement in the eyes of your peers, as far as poetry is concerned. Whether or not Adam did help on this poem, the innermost thoughts are constant and consistent. This poem is thick with a remorseful helplessness. The title is completely perfect. I'll have to say this is my favourite poem so far on this forum. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Welcome to Passions Local Parasite, thanks for commenting, if you like this one, you should read Every Half Beat. Its one of my better ones |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
And if you like my replies, you should respond in kind. Theo |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
AngelPoet, I hope things get better for you. Dawn |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I liked this muchly. I relate to this and these emotions. Adam did well in his assistance as well Good luck with things BTW my muse is on vacay right now, so this will have to be my 3000th post!! WOO HOO Look at me I'm important!! LOL Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
lol, congrats on 3000 Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. Jatdore. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This was just absolutely amazing!!!! It was so sad, yet powerful, and I just loved it!! You've done an incredible job, and this one is going into my library. ~*Nikki*~ ~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Indeed, all will fly again I'm very impressed with this one And I mean it too well done and keep it up thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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