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fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2001-10-29 11:21 PM

hey people, lol wel this is my first post since...well since a long time. i haven't really been writing lately, but i got bored in math class when the lady was teaching addition (yes i am in high school and the teacher is still teaching addition) well gotta go, be honest. thanks.
-bergundy-

i crave the love
that you refuse to give me
i need to be reassured
that you need me too
but you don't seem to need me at all...
what the hell am i to do?
when all i can think about is you
i've tried to not care
i've tried to flip the 'off' switch
on my annoying little heart
but there's nothing i can do
cause i can't stop from loving you

crack my head open
and rip out the pieces
that have bits of you
maybe now i'll be free
free from your tormenting
maybe now i'll die
it's better then sleeping alone
it doesn't work
nothing seems to help
i'm stuck with you
and i don't wanna love anyone else

maybe i'll catch fire
something warm to comfort me
hopefully the flames will burn away my mind
it doesn't matter anyway
cause there's nothing left
except pain

-bergundy-

i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

1 posted 2001-10-29 11:35 PM

happy thoughts, happy thoughts.

i did enjoy the first stanza beaucoup.

definitely my favourite part of the whole piece were the first two lines.

very enjoyable.

keep writing and thanks for the read.

- jen

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2001-10-30 10:38 AM

"i crave the love
that you refuse to give me"

I think that line in itself held a lot of meaning to it...we always want what we dont have...ya kno..the grass is greener on the other side..i think we can all relate to that in some way...

Its nice to see you posting again and i hope you continue to do so....

I enjoyed this a lot..great to see your work!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Poet on Acid
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

3 posted 2001-11-19 01:45 AM

uhm....I think someome needs a hug. The poems are good. The subject matter is superb in my opinion and I like the form as well

"Appreciate your ability to forget...you'll need it when it's time to forgive"

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

4 posted 2001-11-19 12:28 PM

Fearing laughter,

Wow! I loved the first poem. It was very good and something I know all to well. I liked the other poems as well. I'm glad you are back sharing with us at Pip.

Dawn

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