State of Depression (reprise)

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Teen Poetry #5

State of Depression (reprise)

BlackDove
Junior Member

since 2001-10-14

Posts 18
Why are you reading this???

0 posted 2001-10-21 01:39 AM

I hope the tears you cry don't stain the world that waits outside.
Could those tears so cold, eventually wash away your pride?
But still I remain in your presence, struck with fear
Petrified.

Tomorrow never knows what it doesn't know too soon. -Noel Gallagher

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

1 posted 2001-10-21 01:54 AM

Mysteriously dark.Interesting format.
Sometimes the shortest poems are the hardest, and the best
Nicely done

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

2 posted 2001-10-21 06:03 PM

Hmmm... Short, yes. Any less powerful than a longer one? No. I'm not sure what you were trying to say, but that's all right. It was a great read nonetheless.

If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

Missthang
Member

since 2001-07-03

Posts 103

3 posted 2001-10-21 06:15 PM

this was kinda "deep" for such a short poem. i'm not quite sure what you meant witht he last line but the first 2 lines said a lot. a lot of emotion was put into it and i liked it.

never_a_princess
Member

since 2001-06-09

Posts 82
Show Me the Money

4 posted 2001-10-21 07:26 PM

WoW. Shorter than usual...but just as deep as always. *nods* Very well-written poem, buddy! Very.."thought-provoking." :P Keep writing.
__o0o_Anna_o0o__ *waves*

Friends are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly.

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