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Underneath the Thinnest
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Underneath the Thinnest |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Underneath the Thinnest He sank in a pool cold on his skin warm in his soul his mind was a shade of frustration and pleasure twisting what could be called remnants memories of all the stupid happy times he had and their antithesis Something that could be called depression On that January morn he sank and stayed in a pool topped with the thinnest layer of ice you never would see floating and flying tapping and singing against the covering of marble crimson and blue was the most beautious thing you never would see with the hazy fog rushing off the pool of blue and red the storm just breaking in a faraway photograph crushing the sun's light into paper thin swords... and above the sky, was the thinnest layer of clouds you would never see "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
you are one of the few people that can actually make me have a loss for words...once again you've posted an amazing poem..another addition to my library thingy.. me |
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Missthang Member
since 2001-07-03
Posts 103 |
WOW! that's about all i can say. you are amazing with words and i wish i could write like you. i literally "felt" this poem, it gave me chills. you are an awesome writer. i look forward to reading more of yours. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Wow, Sean...incredible. You left me breathless until the very end. Like Pharon said...you also left me speechless... You should be extremely pleased with this one (that's why it's going into me library)! Until your next post.  ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
okay, to be completly honest with you...I didn't understand some of it...but other than that, it was AWESOME, you really took my breath away..till I started getting confused. maybe it's the medicine I took.. anywya, thanks for sharing  ~*~I'm in love with a man named ZU~*~ *huggles Krissy* |
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