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Why You, and Why Me?
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding 
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~Okay, first off, I'm not going to say who this is about, let's just say that he's a very... influential... person in my life. Okay, I pretty much worship the ground he walks on.  Why you and why me? There's nothing between us but friendship. Why you and why me? There's not a chance in anywhere for us. Why you and why me? I crave your approval, though I don't know why. Why you, and why me? I know you're proud of me, but I need to hear you say it. Why YOU and why me? You're not for me and I know it. Why you and why ME? I wish I could have fallen for somebody else... If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Don't you hate it when crazy, confusing stuff goes on between yourself and someone else? It drives me nuts! You pretty much summed it all up there though in your short, direct poem. P.S. - Some people take the whole "short poem" thing as an insult as if their poem wasn't elaborate enough, but considering I value honesty I'd tell you if I thought it was lacking. So none of this -  or this  ... just this  There are always answers as long as you're open enough to accept the answers you were not looking for. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This had a really nice flow to it. Those kinds of feelings are hell to life with aye? Really tear you up inside...it's good that you can get it down though...a lot of people aren't so lucky, they're just stuck with these emotions that they can't tell anyone else about because the words won't come out. Good luck and good work. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Thanks you two... don't worry about the 'short poem' thing. I don't mind! If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I just hope that you do find the answers thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Nice, nice, nice. I hope someday he screams his approval to world. Wouldn't that be nice? Good luck Sky.  Sincerely, Titus PS: I might change 'somebody' to 'someone' And "I know it" to "I know it well." I thought those might make it flow better. Just some ideas  "Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Thanks guys! Hey Titus, I agree with you on the changes you suggested! Thanks! ~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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