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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677
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I got rid of you I thought you were gone But I was wrong as usual You were that voice in my ear Whispering the words that changed me Pointing out my flaws And of course, the simple solution I was desperate, so I took what I saw as the easy road That you you layed out for me That easy road that only made things harder Now I am torn between you and myself What makes my problem go away And my hate for myself But you simply whisper Your magical words in my ear Your simply solution only made more problems But it is like a drug Easily addictive I promised myself That I would never let you come back But now I am so much weaker And you are so much stronger So you have won this time But I promise One day I'll get rid of you *Amanda* |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Haha im the first, well great poem was well written. i like you way of writting. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I liked this alot. So many girls are in this situation. It's horrible. Don't take it. If the guy makes you feel that bad about yourself, kick him to the curb. Yes he's sweet, of course he is cute, but he WON'T change. And it's not healthy for you to have your flaws pointed out constantly and so on. Wonderful write. I loved it- Simply loved it. Keep posting.  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot and wish you the best with your situation. I liked the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
difficult situation...hope things turn out ok. im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I didn't like this piece as much as I do your others. I think you've written better. Something here was missing.. the poem was lacking something, yet I can't wuite put my finger on it. Anyhow, thanks for sharing. I hope to see more soon. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Yezea, your Angel Junior Member
since 2001-06-08
Posts 11Canada |
Aww touching poem.... I know how you feel.. really... I did it.. 3 long years... but.. Believe in you.. dont be afraid by tomorrow and you will be able to rid away . Im with you Yezea |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Actually you guys, you are totally wrong. This isnt to a guy, or any real person. I know that sounds stupid, but it does make sense if you understand. I'm sorry it is missing something. It is kinda old. I havent really been in a poetry writing mood lately, so I figured I would just post some older ones. Later!! *Amanda* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Would you like to kindly explain exactly what it's about I'm lost now, I felt the same that the other readers did. Now your reply back has made me confused appreciate some little detail on this hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Thanks for explaining. Now it makes more sense to me hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Dylan Poe Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 13Illinois, USA |
Interesting way of looking at this widespread problem. Looking at it as an outside enemy was both creative and original. Great read. Dylan If life's a stage |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
Hey it was great. Even though on a tough topic. **Sarah  |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
Not many people can write about such a topic and keep it together, it takes some will power to speak such words and then swallow it all down. Great job /Nick/ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ooo this is really powerful. Before you gave the explanation I knew it was about an eating disorder. The whole strength/weaker thing you had going is really good. Just to note all those that read in Teen Chat, the strength thread, this is what I am talking about. Not everything makes you stronger. Not to go all ranty in your thread  but I really enjoyed the piece. It has a lot to give.Thanks for the read. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
wow... i know what you mean... and revenge is ALWAYS THE ANSWER!! lol... Remember that ALLIE |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this is an interesting situation..i know a person whos got sumbody treating them like crap and it hurts to see that done..thanks for sharing i enjoyed the read "I hope my mum and I hope my dad |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
If I get started on this subject I won't hush so I am just gong to leave it at this: Wonderful poem!  |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I think the last few people who posted here missed this point, but oh well. Thanks Lizzy, I went to that thread and made my comments too. I totally agreed w/ you. |
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