navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » will you love me?
Teen Poetry #5
Post A Reply Post New Topic will you love me? Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
SunShine913
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211
Italy but from NC

0 posted 2001-10-16 07:13 PM



Your hands, cold as ice
But your smile, so warm
How can I keep you?
Call off the storm

Who do you love, boy?
Tell me your dreams
How can I please you?
Is love what it seems?

Where can I find you
When night turns to day?
And how can I love you?
Teach me your way

Your arms encompass
And your eyes delight
How can I explain to you
Why I put up this fight?

When confusion is over
And we've found what to be
How can I ask you?
Will you love me?

                    !~Andrea~!
*You only live once, so live it to the
fullest*
*what is love?*
*If you ever need anyone to talk to feel free to l

© Copyright 2001 Andrea L. Figueroa - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
1 posted 2001-10-16 08:27 PM


Awwww!  How sweet!  You are getting back to the basics of what a love poem is!  I like this, it's clear message and nice flow makes it a poem I like, then Again, has there been any of your work I didn't like?  Hmm.....
AngelPoet87
Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280
Indy
2 posted 2001-10-16 09:18 PM


Awwishly! Yes,I will Love You lol JOKE!

[This message has been edited by AngelPoet87 (edited 10-16-2001).]

Angel Bee
Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176
Virginia
3 posted 2001-10-16 10:10 PM


Good poem, the rhyming was good keep writing ab  

*~We are all pencils in the hands of God --Mother Teresa~*

quietlydying
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz
4 posted 2001-10-16 10:27 PM


i enjoyed that.

nice to see a poem that actually rhymes when intended to.  heh.  nah, i'm just joking.  it was good though.

thanks for the read.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen.  - macbeth act 1, scene 3

sambot
New Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 6
Brissy, Aust.
5 posted 2001-10-24 07:58 AM


That was beautiful, from your heart, you seem sweeter than i thought. Gorgeous.

From Samt

xShUgArHiGhx
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
6 posted 2001-10-24 08:02 AM


This poem was very good...i think love poems are always nice...good job and keep em comin

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

LoneWolf
Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384
IL
7 posted 2001-10-24 05:21 PM


i really liked this one a lot, great job

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Skyfire
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381
Riding
8 posted 2001-10-24 06:09 PM


*sniff* That's so sweet! All your work is so sweet and loving! Good job!

It takes more work to love myself than to love others... I guess that explains it, eh?

never_a_princess
Member
since 2001-06-09
Posts 82
Show Me the Money
9 posted 2001-10-24 08:03 PM


aww good poem! i liked the feeling of it. so true in so many cases... keep writing!
__o0o_Anna_o0o__   *waves*

Friends are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly.

Charisma
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906
lost in blue pages
10 posted 2001-10-25 04:21 AM


awwwwwww....what a sweet gem you present here. Love it!

Charisma

PoetryIsLife
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763
...in my boxers...
11 posted 2001-10-29 11:37 AM


Fantastic! I loved it. I could sense what you were feeling and saying. You came through very clearly in the poem!   Yet you also kept a distance, like you were afraid to be hurt at time. Am I right? or completely off base? LoL I had an idea though... for the last line, I like it, but it seems to short. How about "Will you ever lvoe me?" yes? No? Maybe?   Just a suggestion. Good work. Keep it up chica...

Sincerely,
Titus

"Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling

PoetryIsLife
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763
...in my boxers...
12 posted 2002-01-19 04:52 PM


Anyone heard from Andrea lately? I haven't seen her on in a while.

Sincerely,
Titus

Fading Away
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia
13 posted 2002-01-19 07:32 PM


I haven't heard from her either... hrrm...

But this was a beautiful poem...

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

Mon Cherie
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers
14 posted 2002-01-20 11:49 AM


This is so sweet and loving!! I guess if you really love him, you'll find a way to let him know, to understand how you feel for him. I think one good way is to show him one of your love poems... "accidentally"... hehe

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

kaile
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146
singapore
15 posted 2002-02-17 01:54 AM


:bump:
See me?
Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 93
UK
16 posted 2002-02-17 03:46 AM


I really like this poem i can kinda relate to what i think ur saying (L) can be soo hard and im finding that i dont know how to tell someone i still love them, so if u ever find the solution to your poem please email me. Clare xx


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » will you love me?

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary