Teen Poetry #5 |
will you love me? |
SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
Your hands, cold as ice But your smile, so warm How can I keep you? Call off the storm Who do you love, boy? Tell me your dreams How can I please you? Is love what it seems? Where can I find you When night turns to day? And how can I love you? Teach me your way Your arms encompass And your eyes delight How can I explain to you Why I put up this fight? When confusion is over And we've found what to be How can I ask you? Will you love me? !~Andrea~! |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Awwww! How sweet! You are getting back to the basics of what a love poem is! I like this, it's clear message and nice flow makes it a poem I like, then Again, has there been any of your work I didn't like? Hmm..... |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Awwishly! Yes,I will Love You lol JOKE! [This message has been edited by AngelPoet87 (edited 10-16-2001).] |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
Good poem, the rhyming was good keep writing ab *~We are all pencils in the hands of God --Mother Teresa~* |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i enjoyed that. nice to see a poem that actually rhymes when intended to. heh. nah, i'm just joking. it was good though. thanks for the read. - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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sambot New Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 6Brissy, Aust. |
That was beautiful, from your heart, you seem sweeter than i thought. Gorgeous. From Samt |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem was very good...i think love poems are always nice...good job and keep em comin ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i really liked this one a lot, great job It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*sniff* That's so sweet! All your work is so sweet and loving! Good job! It takes more work to love myself than to love others... I guess that explains it, eh? |
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never_a_princess Member
since 2001-06-09
Posts 82Show Me the Money |
aww good poem! i liked the feeling of it. so true in so many cases... keep writing! __o0o_Anna_o0o__ *waves* Friends are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
awwwwwww....what a sweet gem you present here. Love it! Charisma |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Fantastic! I loved it. I could sense what you were feeling and saying. You came through very clearly in the poem! Yet you also kept a distance, like you were afraid to be hurt at time. Am I right? or completely off base? LoL I had an idea though... for the last line, I like it, but it seems to short. How about "Will you ever lvoe me?" yes? No? Maybe? Just a suggestion. Good work. Keep it up chica... Sincerely, Titus "Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Anyone heard from Andrea lately? I haven't seen her on in a while. Sincerely, Titus |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I haven't heard from her either... hrrm... But this was a beautiful poem... --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
This is so sweet and loving!! I guess if you really love him, you'll find a way to let him know, to understand how you feel for him. I think one good way is to show him one of your love poems... "accidentally"... hehe _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
:bump: |
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See me? Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 93UK |
I really like this poem i can kinda relate to what i think ur saying (L) can be soo hard and im finding that i dont know how to tell someone i still love them, so if u ever find the solution to your poem please email me. Clare xx |
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