My old poem-but new now cuz its changed!

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Alyssa

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since 2001-05-30

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IM ENGAGED!!!!!

0 posted 2001-10-16 11:55 AM

Ok I dont know if yall remember this:
                    "And Still"

                    The sunshine becomes blocked by the clouds,
                    but its still there,
                    like a soul hidden,
                    by a mask of flesh.

                    And still..

                    Love lays deep,
                    in the pit of this soul,
                    like rain,
                    deep in the earth.
                    stored for life to grow from.

                    And still..

                    Life shares many things,
                    like souls share feelings.
                    The clouds move away slowly,
                    releasing the suns rays,
                    like souls releasing their love, slowly,

                    And still..

                    Saving some deep within,
                    to cover,
                    someday,
                    once again.

But I changed it around, to make it this:

                    "And still, I love you more"

                    The love that I have,
                    is much more than before,
                    Like the way you always end up with a little something more,
                    no matter what you do.

                    And still..

                    I find a way,
                    to love you more each day,
                    And theres never enough,
                    Like when you need something so bad,
                    but you dont seem to have enough .

                    And still..

                    Loving you brings so many joys,
                    Hundreds of new ones each and every day.
                    Your smile still amazes me,
                    Each time.
                    Still the same, yet different.

                     And still..

                    Today I awoke, to the sun shining on my skin,
                    and realized, that today,
                    I love you a little more than yesterday
                     once again.

I still like the other one....but I like this one too!!!

"If I made you mad today, would you still love me tomorrow?"-Incubus

[This message has been edited by Alyssa (edited 10-16-2001).]

Alyssa

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IM ENGAGED!!!!!

1 posted 2001-10-16 05:46 PM

no one likes my stupid poetry!!!!!!!

"If I made you mad today, would you still love me tomorrow?"-Incubus

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2 posted 2001-10-17 06:17 PM

I believe both poems are actually equally as good.
They project a different kind of longing.
You did good on these Alyssa
I'm impressed
*applauds*

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3 posted 2001-10-17 07:10 PM

Hi Alyssa, this is great! See ya!

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never_a_princess
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4 posted 2001-10-17 10:44 PM

i see two diff. poems there! both very nicely done! i loved "Life shares many things, like souls share feelings. The clouds move away slowly, releasing the suns rays, like souls releasing their love" Those are lovely lines! Great post!
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5 posted 2001-10-18 08:09 AM

LoL what r u talking about no one likes ur poetry!?!?!?!!?

I remember the first one i think..hmm...?? But either way i liked em both a lot!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..ShE DoeSn

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