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~gretchenp34~ Junior Member
since 2001-10-08
Posts 46Ohio, USA |
Dont say you love me but speak it.... Dont hold my hands but carry them.... Dont look at my eyes but gaze into them.... Dont hold me close but embrace with me tight.... Dont brush your lips upon mine but kiss me gently.... Dont just talk to me but say something.... Dont do things without reason but make them count.... For whatever you do in life will somehow in someway....... Affect someone forever. its a different style of a poem for me.....but new things are always fun to try!!!!  Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart. |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I like it! If it's a new style for you, then I want you to try some more of it, kay?  If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Great!!! I really liked this! Keep posting  *the chains which once held us are only the chains which we've made* |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Dont brush your lips upon mine but kiss me gently.... Dont just talk to me but say something.... Dont do things without reason but make them count.... For whatever you do in life will somehow in someway....... Affect someone forever. ------------------------------------ I really liked the whole thing, but the stanzas above are my favorite. I also agree with the point you made in this poem. Like fingerprints on glass... There are always answers as long as you're open enough to accept the answers you were not looking for. |
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luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
I really enjoyed this! I think this style is a good one!! Keep it up!! I agree with everything you said xpecially the last stanza!! Smile -- because you never know who's falling in love with it. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Nicely done on this, keep writing "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Different styles are always good. You've expressed everything really nicely here. Good work. ~AF~ "I remember the days when I was so eager to satisfy you" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I really enjoyed this one!! Different styles are sometimes nice and refreshing so i think its a good thing to every now and then. It really was a very good poem, i enjoyed it. ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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