Teen Poetry #5 |
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quietlydying![]() ![]()
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz ![]() |
So sweet the toxic words on my empty page. Vulnerability. I cry. Letting the tears flow like a river surging out of my pathetically exhausted body, Taking every last ounce of life. Life, without it, there's..? - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I like this one a lot..... |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a very good poem..i enjoyed it mucho!!! Keep it up ![]() |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Very intriguing...nice one! "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
beautiful, absolutely beautiful and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh yeah! Great! If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
Jenn...the word arrangement made the piece quite more powerful within the words...i liked it. =) |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
WONDERFUL! There isn't really much more to say about it.. this was great jen **library!** *the chains which once held us are only the chains which we've made* |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Interesting type of "free-style" free verse poetry. It has a rather modern and almost hi-tech edge to it, especially in the way you've done your ending. It sounds much like a transmission being interrupted by some unseen menacing force. The images in this poem are done quite well also. It is a poem that is written in a much more "impressionistic" manner, such that it makes the reader have to visualize much more of it internally. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
A well written poem in my mind, very expressive. It seemed to carry a drama in it, I like how it's done. "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
One thing I noticed about your poems, it indeed trigers one's curiosity. It makes me think deep. You have a way with little words and putting them into a piece that questions what is around us. *applauds* keep it up hi Sweets/puff puff/bubbles ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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