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jaded
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0 posted 2001-10-06 04:14 AM


Loving You

Written from memory,
From the depth of the heart,
This life that I'm living,
Its torn me apart

Can't live with you,
Can't live without,
You left me before,
So why do i doubt?

I trust you, know you,
Feel you, want you,
Want to show you -
Just how much you mean to me

Use me, Amuse you,
Upset and confused,
Never want to lose you,

Loving you will kill me


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1 posted 2001-10-06 12:48 PM


love shouldn't hurt bad, it should only hurt good   I liked this one   well done
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2 posted 2001-10-06 08:39 PM


Aaawww... that's so sad and so well-written. Like SEA said, love shouldn't hurt bad... if you need a listening ear, I'm at:
spacebear_15@hotmail.com

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

HopelessRomanticGuy
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3 posted 2001-10-06 08:46 PM


I agree as well, love should NEVER hurt bad, but sometimes it does, I've been there.  If u ever ned to talk, here I am at Lazzzybum2K1@aol.com.
anonymousfemale
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4 posted 2001-10-07 05:39 AM


Love. What a pain. In the end it ends up causing you more heart ache than a burrito.
Remember to stay strong though. When things hit a certain point, they have to go up.

Don't forget to reply too.  

~AF~

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Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

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5 posted 2001-10-07 08:31 AM


Love...grrr.... I dunno about love. I do know that it exists. And when you feel it, it's beautiful. It's also nice if it lasts  
But everyone is right...love shouldn't hurt you... you should feel more complete, happier...etc. Everyone else hurts us in life; the love we have should serve to heal.

Nice work
Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

jaded
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6 posted 2001-10-07 08:31 AM


thanks guys, your great   fortunately, im not having love troubles at the moment, well not anything like in that poem.

i just put myself in that position to see what it must feel like, i hope you enjoyed reading it

thanks for reading and replying  

if dreams had wings I'd fly to you

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7 posted 2001-10-07 01:58 PM


This was a great piece of work, it good to see you can empathise and put yourself in other peoples shoes.

Zu

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