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TeChNo KiTtY
Junior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 22
Wisconsin, USA

0 posted 2001-09-26 03:30 PM

Wanting to hold you,
Wanting you near.
The lonliness I feel,
Is all that I fear.

Will you return,
Or continue on your way?
Leaving me here,
To face another sad day.

Warm thoughts of you,
No doubt will remain.
But along with those,
An unforgiving pain.

Do what you must,
I'll continue to wait.
What happens now,
Is left up to fate.

"i tried so hard, and got so far..but in the end, it doesn't even matter.."
~Linkin Park

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-09-26 05:29 PM

This poem is very good. very sad. I like the style. It reminds me of the style I used to use for love poems.Very nice job
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-09-27 10:28 AM

It certainly is up to fate. I hope things looks up for you though.
Keep smiling and thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-10-06 12:31 PM

You have this distinct style of writing short but very effective lines.
That is really impressive.
I don't think I've read much of your work
But now I'll be looking forward to reading more
Thanks for sharing
beautiful read

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Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-10-06 08:50 AM

I liked this a lot. I can relate!!

Great work.

Jenn

"You've got to get yourself together, you got stuck in a moment, and you can't get out of it."

NathanS
Member

since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
CA

5 posted 2001-10-06 10:19 AM

Excellent job on the poem

Ive been there and can really relate.

-Nathan

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

6 posted 2001-10-06 08:36 PM

Oh I like! I especially like the rhyming scheme (I'm a big one on rhyming) you used! Excellent write!

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

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