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NathanS
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since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
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0 posted 2001-10-05 09:58 PM

Meh... thought id do something that no ones written on

Your shiny steel
Of violence
and anger

Electric adrenaline
surging through
your vains of danger

Prepareing everyone
of destruction
from the stranger

T-t-t-t- to late
for anyone
to be a defender

T-t-t-t- Toasters
will rule all
until the bitter remainder

to the end of time.

-Nathan

silvrduck
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since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

1 posted 2001-10-05 10:45 PM

Whoa! lol I was not expecting toasters, of all things!

I really enjoyed this Nathan, keep posting!

Sarah

*the chains which once held us are only the chains which we've made*
~jewel

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2001-10-07 11:56 AM

ROTFLMAO... I really love this one definitely one for the library. Personification of Machinery I like it although I prefer washing machines and houses myself... Great work

Zu

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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-10-07 12:35 PM

LOL!

Very, very cool!!

Toasters are great. You should do a piece on a frying pan.

~AF~

I look at myself in the mirror; am I vital today?
Nelly Furtado - Hey Man

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2001-10-08 12:48 PM

HAHAHAHHAHHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAAAAAAAA!!!!

wow!! this is SOOOOOOOOOOOOO cool!!!!..i LOVE this piece..for its comic relief its going into the library...wow...i love this one...coool cool cool!

wouldnt it be wonderful if children werent scared of looking up at the sky?

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

5 posted 2001-10-08 02:02 AM

this rocks.

honestly, i love it.

::snickers::

it's great. and even though it's so lighthearted [well, the whole concept], it's actually well written, something you wouldn't expect from a piece that was written jokingly.

i love it.

but i can't help myself. i'm a grammar and spelling freak. can you fix the typos?

i hate to be a *****, but they drive me nuts.

other than that, it's great.

::grins::

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2001-10-08 11:38 AM

This was cool, very intersting. keep on writing.

NathanS
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since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
CA

7 posted 2001-10-08 09:04 PM

Well, i tried editing my poem, but unfortunately i am unable to edit after 24 hours

so here is the edited poem without all the spelling errors

Titled: Steel Anger

Your shiny steel
Of violence
and anger

Electric adrenaline
surging through
your veins of danger

Preparing everyone
of destruction
from the stranger

T-t-t-t- to late
for anyone
to be a defender

T-t-t-t- Toasters
will rule all
until the bitter remainder

to the end of time.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Enjoy!

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
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