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A breeze so cold- 2

NathanS
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since 2001-09-27

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0 posted 2001-10-04 08:46 PM

Well, i revised the poem that i did the first time taking some advice into concideration. So here is what i have come up with:

Titled: A breeze so cold

Have you ever looked
When nothing was there
Have you ever stared into the depths
Of nothingness thats nowhere

An idle mind
With an empty heart
Is there really
All that much to tear apart

In an ocean with no sea
Can no fish live
In a heart without love
Does a relationship become vivid

So is the wind
With a sound so empty
With an appearence so blank
That you cannot observe
For your heart has sank
The feeling becomes obserd

The only essence that lurks
Is a breeze so cold...

-Nathan

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