Teen Poetry #5 |
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patch her up - just like new |
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quietlydying![]() ![]()
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz ![]() |
[patch her up - just like new] Drinking away the madness into a stupor so unrecognizable we say 'oh, she must not be feeling well today'. Too sober, you're drunk on good intentions and a meaningless existence. Has she really fallen so low she stands too tall? Wait, is that possible? ’No’, He says 'here, just have another valium'. He must know best, with all of those degrees on the wall and His name on the door. this one was just pure ramblings popping out my head when i wrote it. tell me what you think. - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 [This message has been edited by quietlydying (edited 09-30-2001).] |
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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. |
I REALLY LIKE THIS! PLUS you used the word stupor and I love that word hehehehee... WOOHOOO!! Good job!! *×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* Don't just trust yourself, learn what parts of yourself to trust. [This message has been edited by Raven Skye (edited 09-30-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I hate that stupid drug so damn much. ![]() Anyway, you write with such a unique style. In fact, the two poems I have read so far have been fantastic. Oooo..I can't wait to see more of them!! Keep writing and thanks for sharing. ~AF~ "Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination" |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I really loved this poem keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Well written free verse poem! I have experienced something similar to what this poem discusses, so I can relate. Good job! "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a very good poem! I liked it a lot ![]() |
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