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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180
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I thougth I knew how it was... I thougth I knew what I felt... I thougth I knew were we stood... And then, everything started to spin, everything moved, went round and round with me in the middle. Suddenly everything is upside down. Upside down and inside out... I know nothing. I am confused. What you told me.. Was it true? Your words..they changed it all. I used to tell myself 'don't fall in love, don't ruin it all, he'll just push you away.' I said 'come down, we're just friends..' And now you tell me you're in love..with me.. I cant understand it I dont dare to belive it Dont know if I want to see it You know, this wont do us any good.. What I was afraid of has happend..to you. Don't you see that this will touch us somehow? I don't want us both to be hurt -again- It's as hard for me as for you.. but we both know it cant be.. Its too many things that will keep us apart. You say that you will wait. I just wonder..for how long? Do you know that you hold my heart? Do you know that you can easily break it? Im so open to you.. Please be careful my friend.. Stop for a second, think before you move. Think about this for a while.. That's what I ask of you.. Are you sure that you'll love me? Have you given a thougth to what you must give up to get me? ..Everything has a price, you know.. Are you ready to pay? Will you take the chance..? If you're willing..I'll go with you. Don't know if it's wise, but for better or for worse. I will try. And I hope.. I hope we'll be good. I belive we'll be good. We need to be together. Together We'll Be Good -*- this was what I thougth..*sighs* Naive and in love..When I read trough it now, it's so very foolish.. Certainly he hadn't thougth enough about it..Wanna know how this ended? read the poem 'losing my hope' then..ohwell. thanks for reading. -*- |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hi Zarina.  It's smart of you to be sure about relationships instead of just jumping into them. People just don't realize that so much is at risk. I really liked this and I'm curious to see how it turned out...So off I go to read the other poem. HaHa. Great write though! I enjoyed it. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is very good, Zarina. I really enjoyed this, and it isn't foolish in the slightest. You expressed yourself very well, and portrayed your apprehension to love very clearly. Nice work. I hope to see more from you. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i really liekd how you ended this poem...overall it was a great expression of your emotions...enjoyed it...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
Thanks for reading and responding.. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful job in expressing here. I enjoyed this poem a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You've expressed a lot of emotions on this piece. Unfortunately, there is no guarantees in life. Hope things are better now. Keep sharing and thanks for the read. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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