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Dreamscape #4: Portrait
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Dreamscape #4: Portrait |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Tattered edges from Fingered over corners Soft, yet weak From endless viewings. A lady sits and gazes into What we see as nothing Yet somehow, something rides Beyond her eyes But not beyond the illusion Wandering in her mind. Keeping her alive in black and white Her soul is caged within. A simple photograph Of time... Unspoken. For we read the words engraved within Her face And the picture that we do not hold... As our fingerprints smudge the last remaining Details and it Burns within the fire... + + + + + Inspired by a single photograph...major assumptions, but hey, you know how it goes... ~Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
and you did a VERY well done on protraying the images...a single picture sometimes tells SO much...doesnt it?  |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
A picture is worth a thousand words...you've expressed some in your poem. As my borough has always stated- Do or Die. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Bravo! I liked how you wrote this...very descriptive. Jenn "In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It's amazing how much we can get from just one single photograph, isn't it? They tell so much but leave too many questions open to the imagination. Excellent job on the imagery here. You've given such a fantastic description that I actually have some sort of idea what the photo looks like. Great job as per usual. Thanks for sharing this with us all Leeeeee-yah  ~AF~ "Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination" |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
*snaps fingers* Leah! You never cease to amaze me! You're almost TOO good...what's your secret? If I've lost the girl of my dreams...who am I looking for now? |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Impressive. All of that from a single photograph. It would be neat though to know what the photo was a picture of anyway. I got the feeling of looking at one of those old black and white photos of an old old woman in her rocking chair. Please tell me I'm close. Anywho, another great poem...yea definitely a great poem "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
you know i do exactly the same thing- stare at old photographs..mainly of my pop and grandad (both of whom died before i was born), and wonder what might have been going through their minds at the time. or what it might have been like to be him looking at the person photographing him. what they might have said to make them smile- or not. what their lives where like at the time of the photo. loads of different things. they're gone now of course...but theyre there "Of time.../Unspoken." i think you did wonderfully with this one. captured my thoughts pretty well. thanks for sharing leah The day I stopped loving I died. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You are one of my favorite poets in PIP. You neve cease to amaze me *standing ovation* <--- again là où est mon amour? |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This was a sweet one! Don't worry if you're making "major assumptions". I mean, you were inspired, and it paid off in a great poem that I shall be placing in my library! Keep up the good writing. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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