and this is what a writer's block sounds like... oh bleh.

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quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-07-02 01:57 AM

this has quite possibly got to be the worst piece i have written in a long while. i'm trying to get over a writer's block right now [and you all know what it's like], if you've noticed that i haven't been around in a while.

sometimes i crave,
i miss,
i NEED that sweetness
of your touch
breath
smell.
i feel
the warmth
of the sound
of your voice
and i forget
everything
that had once
crossed my mind.

i can be too
maguanimous
at times.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

1 posted 2001-07-02 07:35 AM

i think it's better than what I could do with writers block lol

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

2 posted 2001-07-02 11:47 AM

This is a good piece considering you have writers block. You put a lot of emotion into this poem. Great job!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

3 posted 2001-07-02 12:56 PM

If this is writers block then I can't wait to see verse that isn't from you!

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-07-02 06:56 PM

I echo the others. Even w/ the block it's good.

Jenn

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

5 posted 2001-07-02 06:56 PM

I liked it, thought you did very well concidering.

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-07-02 11:02 PM

This is very good! Wow, everyone seems to be on writer's block right now. I really liked the last three lines... you did a nice job. I haven't seen you around here much, but I personally find that muse often shows itself during my writer's block when I read lots of other's work, and critique other's poetry. Maybe that'll help... best of luck with that

Keep posting all your work... I look forward to seeing more from you.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-07-02 11:05 PM

im glad to see you post your poems again

...and writers block suks..eh?

...but great job!...the emotions were nice in this one...i enjoyed it...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

8 posted 2001-07-03 01:08 AM

I think "writers' block" is contagious right now. And yet everyone who thinks they have it are writing awesome poems. Like this one!!!

Good write. don't let the evil writers' block stop you from writing!!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-07-03 08:20 PM

I really think you should add some sort of punctuation at the end of whenever you stop a sentence or whatever.
Besides that I thought you wrote the poem wonderfully. I liked it a lot.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-07-06 11:57 AM

I enjoyed the read. I too would like to see some punctuation.

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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

11 posted 2003-01-31 03:02 PM

I wish I had writers block like this, absoloutely magnificent

Andrew

kirhar
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since 2003-04-29

Posts 13

12 posted 2003-04-29 08:52 PM

dude, i wish my poems when i had writers block were this good. lol. i really like your poem... awesome job

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