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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
What makes the rainy days seem so bright what can lite up the darkest of night what could make it all worth while can turn sorrow into a smile Just you Who can make my day, when nothings right who helps give me strength when I can no longer fight who can just smile and turn my world upside down who else would allow me to act like such a clown Just you how is it that you effect me so how can even your softest words make me grow how is it that you make me want to be more without ever knowing what is in store... Just you? Ok peeps its cheezy but often times so is love, anyways peace out.... we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This was nice. When you feel like this, everything in the world is perfect. I miss that.Good poem Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
This one is a keeper...i am feeling it...Great write!! ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this one was quite nice...it had a nice flow to it. very well done on this one. hope to read more from you soon!  "Somehow I managed to single handedly betray myself" Javier Agosto |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Isnt it weird how one person can just make everything appear in a different light?? You definately expressed that well in this poem... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Lovely piece of writing. Love does do these things to us. I hope you have this feeling and this person for a long time. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
jimmy why don't you email me anymore i miss you! i really liked your poem. robin Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Robin sorry I'm never online anymore and when I am it's usually to post something stupid or check my schedule for playing drums so anyways I'll talk to you later. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
it's alright hun. i just wish you would email me so i know you are ok. robin Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
HeHe, This reminded me of one of the lil poems I used to read out of my Precious Moments book thingy...Except it was like "Who turns on the bedroom light so I can go out and play? My daddy does. But who turns on the sun?" Etc etc...and in the end it's God, of course... ANYWAY...HeHeHe... I liked how you ended the last "Just you" with a question mark. Nice touch. Nice write...Not cheesy at all! United we stand, Divided we fall. |
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