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Jiggity J-Dogg
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since 2001-09-04

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0 posted 2001-09-04 04:34 PM

My Epic (No official title)
By Jordan Auth

I try to explain myself
But I can see you’re scared
You mean everything to me
But you don’t seem to care
You probably want me to leave you
But I can’t stand to see you
Make the same mistakes
Same ones you’ve made before
Anymore

With feelings built up inside me
It’s sometimes hard to talk out loud
I might not always walk so proud
But you won’t keep me down
Not this time around
With the good friends close beside me
I find out who they really are
I learn about myself
How I can’t help
Unless you really want my help
And I hope happiness is not being kept too far

I felt the storm clouds coming closer
And I tried to bring them to a halt
When the truth can hurt you won’t believe it
But how long will you say that it’s my fault?

I wonder if you ever get tired
Tired of always being mad
Treating people bad
Making people sad
Does it help you deal
With what’s inside?
And make the past subside?
You can’t really want to end right now
I’ll help you if I have to crawl
And I don’t trip and fall
We’ll get it right this time
It will be fine
We’ll make no regrets at all
Cause I’ll be yours and you’ll be mine

‘Cause change could happen very soon
I think we’d better make some room
So we won’t be swept away
Like dust on a broom
Emptiness may mean that heartfelt things
Are chosen to be kept away
Just for another day
Until the right time comes
But I know that you mean when we’re done
Because that’s what you always say

When I learn to deal with sadness
I might find another way
A way to make them pay
But that’s another day
Whenever that day comes to me
It might not be so far away
When it comes and when it goes
It seems I’m never first to know
And when the good times end
My friend
I guess it’s time to pray

And when I felt the clouds come closer
I tried to stop them one by one
Though I know I’ll someday find replacement
I’ll always wonder why we’re done

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1 posted 2001-09-04 04:54 PM

WELCOME!!!

wow, that was long, but not bad at all. I liked it.

I think it was a great first post

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2 posted 2001-09-04 05:16 PM

Welcome to passions I really enjoyed the read, well done a very good first post, hope you enjoy your say here

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3 posted 2001-09-04 05:37 PM

First off...

WELCOME TO PIP!

"I felt the storm clouds coming closer
And I tried to bring them to a halt
When the truth can hurt you won’t believe it
But how long will you say that it’s my fault?"
Oh, and I LOVED the first half of the following Stanza!
VERY awesome write, incredible first post as well.You poured yourself, your thoughts, you feelings, and so much more into this piece- And what a wonderful result you got! Thanks for the read! I hope to see much more posts AND replies form you Very soon!

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4 posted 2001-09-04 11:40 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

this was a VERY nice first post...i liked it...quite the heartfelt poem...hope to see you read, share and reply MORE!

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cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2001-09-04 11:50 PM

first off :

WELCOME JORDAN!

                             "With the good friends close beside me
                               I find out who they really are
                               I learn about myself
                               How I can’t help
                               Unless you really want my help
                               And I hope happiness is not being kept too far"
wow i liked this first post from you HEAPS! you can tell that there has been a fair amount of work and effort put into this one!  this is one incredible write jordan i cant wait to read more from you!

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