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Teen Poetry #5

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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2001-09-03 01:50 AM

I used the same style on this one as "Mind," but this I dont think is nearly as good. Oh well, let me know what you think anyway.

INSIDE YOU

Dreaming
A whole new world
Inside you

Drifting
Mind going off
Deeply sleeping

Resting
All is calm
Inside you

Screaming
Dream world creatures
On attack

Kicking
Defeating the nightmares
Inside you

Waking
Breathing in very deep
All is right

      - Cody -

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

1 posted 2001-09-12 01:05 PM

That was a really good read
No matter what, things do get better
dream or not
thanks for sharing
keep it up

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keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-09-12 03:36 PM

I liked this one. I thought it was very good.
Jon

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anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-09-12 03:39 PM

And we think that sleep is our save haven..what a bloody joke. It's good to see you defeat these nightmares as such.

Good piece Cody. I like this style from you. Write some more like this.

~AF~

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Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

4 posted 2001-09-12 04:59 PM

Veyr cool way of writting and a good poem indeed

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