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Staring at the night sky
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Staring at the night sky |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
just another one of my uniteresting posts.... Staring at the night sky: Ghostly wonders floating in the twilight skies, revolving in my eyes surrounding the shining moon. A crystalized reflection of the sun, and like this beautiful moon I find my mind. On one side light shines, and I come to understand the moment, but the other side stays dark, and I find emptyness and confusion. This moment seems not to pass, exploring in myself this endless limbo continued throughout the night. Yet as the night comes to pass, inside me this limbo ends. Although I am perplexed the reality has not affected me and I walk forth to the new day.  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
i liked this. i thought there were good ideas in it. keep writing. ab *~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~* |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
I really liked the simile of relating to the moon in this. Thanks for sharing. xscoutx |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
First of all, this is in no way uninteresting! This was a GREAT read. I really enjoyed this. The analogy you used to portray your emotions was awesome. While the sun's down, the dark side of the moon is being shown... This is excellent. VERY nice work. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
 I liked this alot! The whole comparison of your mind and the moon was something completely different- and yet it still totally made sense. I've never heard or even thought to put it put that way. Great work here.  |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
The poem kept me reading till the very end, and even at the end I didn't want it to end. :P Awesome job! "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great emotions protrayed ...the imagery in this piece was awesome...enjoyed greatly...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
well everyone I'm glad you like it , and I hope you'll always enjoy any of my stuff you take your time to read. Thanx for posting and g'nite.I see the darkness coming all is bleak... [This message has been edited by Crash&Burn (edited 07-02-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"Although I am perplexed the reality has not affected me and I walk forth to the new day" Beautiful words. What more can i say. You've done well, hope to see more Keep sharing and thanks for the read hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Jorge I really liked this one. I loved the images you gave off in this one. Very well done here. I enjoyed this one a lot. I am proud to say you are my friend....well.....right now, but don't get used to it pal. We need to go out soon, call me...(fernando's fairwell party-thurs) One again, nicely done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
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