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When you look at me
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When you look at me |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
when you look at me what do you see when you look at me? is there more here that you see? am i just a girl standing here with you? or is there much more here to pursue? when i look at you i see all that i want and need you mean the world to me, and i won't let you go you've caused my heart to heal, no longer to bleed i want to tell you all this but i can't let my emotions show ive been hurt before let the others get too close now i can't be sure of all the sweet things you say but i have a feeling you're going to turn out to be different from most i don't want to loose you, no i never want to see that day so what do you see when you look at me? do you see just another girl or the one you love? because i see the one i love, the one with whom i want to be you're not an ordinary guy, you're my gift from above *~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~* [This message has been edited by Angel Bee (edited 06-30-2001).] |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
I like this one more then the other, I don't know, i like how you said "you're not an ordinary guy" reminds me of a song, that line sticks out, shows that you like someone more then gender. xscoutx |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is such a sweet poem. Very well written for that special someone. I hope you show this to him. Nice work! I enjoyed this. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Good poem... it's got lots of questions we always have when we're interested in someone. Keep writing! "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a good write. I see you're in a delema of whether to get serious again or not. I guess having our hearts broken before gives us this feeling. I hope you do see though that one day, we still have to open up. I hope things go well. Thanks for the beautiful read. Keep sharing hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare [This message has been edited by acire (edited 07-01-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I am guessing you are having some doubts about this guy. All I can say is either follow your head or your heart. You have to choose between the two wisely, because there is no way to tell which will end in more heartache. I hope all turns out well, and thanks for the great read. *Amanda* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Oh Angel- I loved this! I think alot of people will relate to this. It's natural to be catious around the fire if you've been burned before. Let yourself heal. I'm sure the guy will be understanding. And I bet he already knows how you feel.  You should show him this. It's a great write! Keep posting.  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You did a really nice job here and I see that this must be a trying time for you. Good luck with the future.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sweet...and the poem was beautiful...i liekd how youw rote this ...graet job!im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"so what do you see when you look at me?" I liked this line the best because its the question we all want to know the answer to when we are in love with someone. I found this poem easy to relate to. Keep up the good work. Interesting, intriguing and inspiring. ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
i can relate, gret job, keep posting*dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Angel Bee, I really enjoyed the read  Andrew |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Good poem i liked it a lot looking forward to seeing some more. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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