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Behind the Veil
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Behind the Veil |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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BEHIND THE VEIL Sunlight filters through the room, I wake to face another day. A world of lifeless, listless gloom, I let all caring slip away. The shadows linger in the hall As my feet meet the cold damp floor. Such wicked penchant in her call, I know this day was meant for more. And yet the dim lit walls would groan Their displeasure in my grave tread; As to announce, for me alone, Measures marked here but for the dead. I listen to their grievous cry, And wonder of a lifetime past; As thought recoils from a lie That holds both eyes and heart downcast. An angel of my darkest day, She blurs my vision to a tear, Rapes my hope and bleeds away All convictions of yesteryear... Until, from frozen revery, I wake to Darkness with a sigh. Perchance, ‘tis but my destiny That ev'ry day before me die. Yet no remorse is found within The echoes of this lonely trail. I'll stumble and I'll fall again Before the eyes behind the veil. And if in sorrow, if in dream, Perchance the sun shall rise again; Would not be wise that I should deem It more than a "remember when..." Michael Anderson But dreams of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned and die. EAP [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 05-20-2001).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Michael, Oh how sad  Beautifully written, but sad. Hugs to you.TaraB |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Micheal.. This is awesome..I miss your work, but when you do post here, there is a gift to be treasured.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sad, yes...but truly lovely as always... I loved this--so personal in its anxiety-- "As to announce, for me alone, Measures marked here but for the dead." (Okay, okay, so haven't had my coffee... )And then... "Until, from frozen revery, I wake to Darkness with a sigh. Perchance, ‘tis but my destiny That ev'ry day before me die." --couldn't help but think of the Apostle Paul here, dying daily... somebody smash my fingers here I go again: "I'll stumble and I'll fall again Before the eyes behind the veil." Perfect. I will paraphrase a favorite quote from a favorite movie and tell ya: "Ya make me wanna be a better poet..." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Beautifully written, Michael, an honest portrait of that place beyond pain. Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The shadows linger in the hall As my feet meet the cold damp floor. Such wicked penchant in her call, I know this day was meant for more. And yet the dim lit walls would groan Their displeasure in my grave tread; As to announce, for me alone, Measures marked here but for the dead. I listen to their grievous cry, And wonder of a lifetime past; As thought recoils from a lie That holds both eyes and heart downcast. =============================== Did ya just know I needed to read your rhymes tonite *S* superb stark imagery and spatterings of inner ryhme along with your always divine cadence and line rhyme but tis the intensity and depth of the emotions express that hold me to every word. and ditto me twin-sen...with one correction... you make us ALL want to be better poets  Excellence poet M,  jm |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Good to see you again, Michael, thanks for a wonderful read. Kathleen Blake |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This goes back to the top, Mike. |
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Morgoth Junior Member
since 2001-05-21
Posts 26Baltimore, MD |
I am new in here, and just came across this really well done poem and had to say how much I liked reading it. It fits me to a "T". Awesome poetry here. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wonderful, Michael, deep and heart felt. You do profound, lovely emotions so superbly! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are the master poet. This is deep and well written! Every poem you write makes me read it holding my breath.....waiting to exhale from the sheer joy of reading you!  |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Thank you each and all for your kind replies. Michael |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I listen to their grievous cry, And wonder of a lifetime past; As thought recoils from a lie That holds both eyes and heart downcast." "Until, from frozen revery, I wake to Darkness with a sigh. Perchance, ‘tis but my destiny That ev'ry day before me die." A beautifully lyrical glimpse into the depths of sorrow Michael ... some mornings, it just feels like the day is over before it even begins. Wonderful cadence and rhyme as always ... I so enjoy your writing, it always makes me ponder . Thank you for this beautiful read this morning. Best wishes, /Kit |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sheer perfection, Michael... I don't think I remembered to breathe while reading! *S* Such intense sorrow... so superbly written! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
powerful and very dark. take care "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad write  |
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