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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-06-02 12:57 PM


What is it?
What is it I can do?
This half of me
in search of you?
How much air
can one lung breathe?
How do I live
with half of me?
There is nothing
without all...
half of me
before the fall...
forever, I, beyond the gates,
of Eden, I, forever wait
and pray for deed to be redeemed...
and once again, you're one with me.



© Copyright 2001 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Logan
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1 posted 2001-06-02 01:26 PM


Paradise lost and then regained to make the half again a whole is the wish I give..nicely done...gentle smile
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2001-06-02 04:41 PM


Your day will come, my dear. I promise. Loved this (but then I love all you write!).
Sven
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3 posted 2001-06-02 04:45 PM


and ever it shall be. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2001-06-02 05:01 PM


Serenity,
Well if that don't get him I don't know what will. Lovely poem. Sy

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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5 posted 2001-06-02 05:49 PM


Karen, Karen, Karen hon...

remarkable the emotion you can put into your words...

it's heady...

hugs...

K

It is to do with tree-ferns:
mamuka, pongo, wheki.
Shelter under here is so easily understood.
From 'Hope', by Dinah Hawkins


Irish Rose
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Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-06-02 05:50 PM


I adore anything written about Eden, my skin care is even called Eden and oh, I'm rambling again....

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-06-02 11:05 PM


How much air
can one lung breathe?
How do I live
with half of me?
There is nothing
without all...
half of me
before the fall...
==============================

just how many mirrors can you hold up in one day...
your muse is on fire baby....
(did you drink MY vials) *L*  
me

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2001-06-02 11:15 PM


Oh, this is so true and so perfectly said
Sandra

Saunni
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9 posted 2001-06-02 11:37 PM


Yes, your day will come! It will! Beautifully written  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

latin passion
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 576

10 posted 2001-06-03 12:59 PM


this is a wonderful poem, feel the same.

Life is to short to not appreciate all of nature's gifts. As I sit & ponder in awe - quietly.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

11 posted 2001-06-03 07:13 PM


Oh Hon,
I have tears and I am speechless....
truly.

Maree

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