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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
....her "Illusive Reasoning".... Maintaining a Fire Trail Before I sensed, through weight of breath And the slowly expanding radius of pain In my lower back, Others noticed the gradual increase in distance. Perhaps I grew in being bent Upon the Joy Of work that took me over brooks Whose hesitation in the deep, Dry heat of August, Let me kneel to cup and sip, Before they hurried off ahead To translate to an Aspen grove The humble words of axe and shovel. Looking back, I felt that I had surely stuttered (for lack of others on the path seemed small reward for all my effort). But just as light set into dark, A spark recalled why I had labored. RMW |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this poem i can relate to well at least the laboring part,its a great read,thanks  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You wrtie/speak very professionally poetic...this is excellent musing....thanks!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bob-- "Perhaps I grew in being bent" There is not a question of perhaps..beautifully worded, this. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well, Bob, I do enjoy reading your work. Don't we usually realize the fruits of our effort on the wane? Just as in life. I think you have inspired me to a work. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Yes the joy is in the work sometimes. I know that as an avid gardener. Very nicely penned. Joyce |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful phrasing throughout Bob, very nicely written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...it is that spark you saw.... ...that you have shared... thank you for this, Sir... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I enjoyed this response very much! Kathleen Blake |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Bob, What a lovely surprise to find this gem on a Sunday morning! Thank you for the poem. I must remind myself that I do write for me and nothing that anyone else says by way of criticism really matters. Of course, one is always one's worst critic, yes? Your words translate to me as self-discovery, through what we do and express, and that is a wonderful reminder about what writing is really all about. Thank you. Cor |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Excellent write, Robere... ~Tier |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderfully written. Sometimes we lose sight of the fact that the writing is just an expression of ourselves and meant for us. Others see it often as words on a screen and feel they have the write to tear it apart when really we are just sharing thoughts. They are not meant to offend. I hate when people read it things personally. They are just words. Take them at face value. Nice write, Robert. All writing comes |
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