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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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no dew drops kiss, no feather touch, no blissful bliss, all daffodil has long since died, no rippled pond to still my mind. another day another wish-- myself away... no pistol pointed to my head-- no point-- I am already dead. *repost from DP2* |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
What a dismal feeling in this poem...hope that these aren't at all what your presently feeling. As always sharply written. Poeminister |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well now that was a depressingly beautiful poem! No shooting Celeste everyone needs your poetry to speak out! I'm in awe of how such dark things can be so beautiful! This is a good one! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, That the best ghost writing I've read in a long time. *L* Sy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wow, you ok? Kathleen Blake |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you write it...I feel it... and "ditto" what Sy said ... hes always right  heartachingly beautiful me twin... now do ya need me to LIST POINT??? ok...Ill spare ya the lectures... cuz YOU KNOW .. yadda yadda yayaya  meI'm hanging on your every word |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I loved it until the end. I guess I still love it, yet I am strangely unsettled by it. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
all daffodil has long since died, no rippled pond to still my mind. what dies is always reborn. powerful writing but remember the calm always follows the storm. "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: i love you...... god, i love you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Oh sure ... You load it, spin the barrel, cock it, squeeze the quill and play Louisiana Roulette with our hearts ~ Bullseye ! Wonderfully emotive. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
The daffodils bloom each spring, after enclosing themselves in the death of winter, bloom again...wonderful read..gentle smile |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - very powerful words you post tonight. I feel, as I've been there. BC |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You write my life. |
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pamela08 Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 27California,USA |
once again you amaze me how you write but this time i hope you really dont feel this way...even though some of us do feel this way....that would be the easy way out....it was a great read true beauty comes from within not from without |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wanted to thank everyone, but was dismayed too, at how many could relate...to me this was a challenge to describe the nothingness feeling of depression...Marge? no russian roulette for me--I DON'T BACK DOWN. With smiles and hugs to all---I'm fine...and have every intention to do better! Love, smiles and hugs for all!Came back to say to Doreen? THAT has got to be the best all time reply....and any others willing?...  ALL DONATIONS OF LOVE ACCEPTED!!!! [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-02-2001).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity sweetie your poem took my breath away and I gotta tell ya hun it's always a special treat for me to read your exquisite writing... Hugs2Ualways *~coco~* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
another sun another day another wish-- myself away... no pistol pointed to my head-- no point-- I am already dead. sighhh girl, hows about I pop over and we drink ourselves silly? I assure you, I'll be GREAT company  many HUGS me sista, luv ya. Maree "little miss understood little misunderstood" ~Marry me Jane~ [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 07-02-2001).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I relate, and I too "never back down"! You do it well, and I hope you keep doing it, as it serves a purpose for you and for those of us who can relate. Hugs! If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Serenity ....... It is very precise but comprehensive.......Excellent job |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
No rainbow tears, no dew drops kiss, no feather touch, no blissful bliss, all daffodil has long since died, no rippled pond to still my mind. another sun another day another wish-- myself away... no pistol pointed to my head-- no point-- I am already dead precise, compact...and powerful..just the way I love them... you always amaze me... Faded flower days nights gloaming grows Loon call haunts Still water and rippled minds |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Haunting words, Serenity. I hope all is well. All writing comes |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
err, ahh, Serenity? Yanno, I've got this little necrophilia obsession, and I was wondering if... oh, never mind... it was just some wishful thinking anyway - lol. Quite a punch in this poem. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 07-02-2001).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Well ... I see your pen still works as good as any pistol you hit me right in the eyes Not Fair! So very nicely done Rex |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Coco...I blush from your compliments and attention...gawd but I've missed you...can't wait until you post one of YOUR beauties! THANK YOU.Maree? It's a DATE MY SISTA! Who could resist? Mysteria...thank you kind lady! You've got a lot of class, yanno that? Waseem...thank you for reading. As you already know, I enjoy YOUR work much as well! CH--You flatter me...and I'm so glad. I'm all aglow, thank you! LW--well, I've seen better days...but this one was written hmmm...last year, I think. Back then I told the good folks in DP forum that it was brought on by the worst case of PMS that I'd ever had! Hope you are well, as well!!!LJ...you wicked, funny man! Thanks so much! Good to have your humor gracing the forum again!And Rex Allen...trust me sweetie, you are quite unforgettable! I pray that all is well with you, you've been in my thoughts as I am going through some similar personal probs. HUGS..have missed you! Thanks all...now, I swear one of these days I WILL write something so happy it'll knock the socks of you good people and we can all dance barefoot!!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Taking up the challenge to match Doreens answer. Hey, I love you lots! As for this poem, I absolutely felt this way, for about a week last October. Now the pain passed but the rest of it is still there. You perfectly described the black hole. And I have read happy poems from you, so I know this is not your only side. Peace Sandra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sandra--I think everyone goes through this once in awhile...and the sun does shine again, even when the light annoys us... Hugs. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Profound comment you have there hon...even when the light hurts... hugs...fellow K  KI am a refugee of logic...insisting |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Boy, does this hit hard, have you been watching my life? ~hugs~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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