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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2001-06-01 09:03 AM



Among the endless shine of silent stars
And constant sparkles from the boundless skies
Cheerful smiles are squirted from distant far
Sprayed by an impish moon who's yet so shy.



© Copyright 2001 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2001-06-01 09:13 AM


I love how you end this one Sudhir.....

"Sprayed by an impish moon who's yet so shy."

What a great line!   Good work my friend!

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-06-01 09:19 AM




now who's being brilliant  


I'm hanging on your every word
Even if you dont want to speak tonite
It's alright
I'm sitting outside heaven's door
listening to you breathe

Mabel A. Dilley
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3 posted 2001-06-01 10:42 AM


This was simple beauty and a snapshot of thought.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Interloper
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Deep in the heart
4 posted 2001-06-01 10:44 AM


gr8 piece!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Irish Rose
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5 posted 2001-06-01 10:45 AM


the moon shone in this one  

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Watersign6
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6 posted 2001-06-01 06:35 PM


what lovely writing an thought  
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2001-06-01 08:18 PM


Sudhir~
I LOVE any mention of the moon ~

And when she's smiling at you ...
a half-world away ... I see her dimples !


This is an inspirational smile you've shared !
Thank you, poet.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Martie
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8 posted 2001-06-01 08:40 PM


Hi Sudhir--this is so sweetly original, with your gift of giving me a smile...thank you.
Severn
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9 posted 2001-06-02 06:05 PM


Absolutely original...can't say there's a cliche here lol!

Never thought of a squirting moon before...love it..

K

It is to do with tree-ferns:
mamuka, pongo, wheki.
Shelter under here is so easily understood.
From 'Hope', by Dinah Hawkins


Saunni
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10 posted 2001-06-04 02:38 PM


Just lovely all the way around! A great write indeed!  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Watersign6
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11 posted 2001-06-04 02:52 PM


really loved it  
helen smith
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12 posted 2001-06-04 04:02 PM


She is beaming down her approval
Mr»ÄlleÿÇät
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13 posted 2001-06-04 04:14 PM


Very good indeed,!
Thank you for the read
Mr»ÄlleÿÇät


Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 2001-06-05 04:59 AM


Ethome, my friend, glad that your eyes landed on the line. Thanks, for coming by and responding.

Janet, you of course, my friend. Thanks a lot.

Julian, a snapshot is a perfect assessment, thank you

Interloper, thanks for the gr8

Kathleen, and since you came by, it still is shining, my friend

Watersign6, thanks a lot, and I welcome you to passions.

Marge, my friend, and I love it when I see you name with this thread. Thank you

Martie, I am glad that I am able to bring you some smiles. Thank you

Kamla, the uncliched words (is that a valid word???) my 'squirting' thanks to you

Saunni, thank you very much, been a long time since I saw your name; welcome back!

Watersign6, thanks once again

Helen, glad to hear that, thanks

Mr Alley Cat, thanks a lot for coming by and your approving response

Regards to all,
Sudhir

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