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Secret Whisper
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since 2001-01-25

Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass

0 posted 2001-05-31 06:52 PM

She's Beautiful

Woman Uncovered
Sky-Clad with honey hair
Not yet desired
Sprinkled with kisses of angels, fair
Don't tell her she's beautiful

You waste words on this wasting beauty
She won't believe a syllable you say
You'll never comprehend her fully:
"Hell will never see a frozen day."
Don't tell her she's beautiful

Each lovely word drips anthrax
Driving daggers into her hearts shell
Pains her as tempting-belief drowns her
Slaps herself out of this witches spell
Don't tell her she's beautiful

She hates the lies that pervaded her life
Before, No more time for hopes and dreams
Please don't tell her she's beautiful
She's afraid she might believe

"What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

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with you

1 posted 2001-05-31 06:54 PM

wow.....this is great!

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

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Netherlands

2 posted 2001-05-31 07:08 PM

Yes....love it, very sweet poem you've written

Titia

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

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Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-05-31 07:10 PM

It is OK to believe. Well done.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25

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Hurricane,WV

4 posted 2001-05-31 09:46 PM

very much enjoyed this one

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-05-31 09:58 PM

If I were to "look" into this poem, an artful write, I would see the symbiotic nature of the cover girl ... that "shell"...once on the cover, so "beautiful" but who is s/he to believe...

well done....

you didn't ask for a critique...so I didn't...just some introspective....

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-05-31 10:05 PM

Yes, it is okay to believe for we are all beautiful in some way to the Great Perceiver
even if our skin hides the beauty we enfold

Ann
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since 2000-07-07

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Australia

7 posted 2001-06-01 03:40 AM

great poem! i loved it

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

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Virginia

8 posted 2001-06-01 03:45 PM

she should tell herself she is beautiful.... because she is, i'm sure

thanks for the read

Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-06-01 03:53 PM

enjoyed but left the reader wondering what the lie was?

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Secret Whisper
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since 2001-01-25

Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass

10 posted 2001-06-01 04:13 PM

I guess I really wasn't as clear as I could have been. I guess a little explination is necessary. The lies are those people who told her they loved her (because she's beautiful) and then left her (conveying to her that she is "ugly"). Sorry about the confusion

"What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO

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