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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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On You It roils inside the well of me, agitates down to bedrock to surface parboiled, quaking every cell, from within to pores of skin, saps all strength in an aching rush of spinning race and forces me to face you. The emotion focused, fuses into one sad, sad song. © 2001 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 05-30-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
what outstanding images and expression in every word and the ending...perfect. Kathleen Blake |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ah, dearest Cor, sad songs drift across desert sand until they are lost in the wind of new melodies..you always have been so talented..as ever was...gentle smile |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Corrine....what a beautiful, haunting piece of poetry  |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Cor....."Tears and Laughter"...Kahlil Gibran. (He might have added....fill the heart with joy...(small J in joy). A lovely poem, as always. Bob |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The coming together of this...the focus to sadness, was intensely received. Well done! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is sad but your use of metaphors and adjectives to describe that sadness is wonderful.....such descriptive language, I really enjoyed this piece very much! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Kathleen, for such kind words. Logan, wonderful to have you near again, my friend, although you've never left my side! And thank you. I'm thinking another visit to the desert, when the heat takes its leave...October is a perfect time to go. Ruth - thank you! Bob, Such comfort in your words, joy with a small "j." Would that it could be "J" as large as life! Thank you, my friend. Thank you Joy, Vandana and JLR! Corinne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
powerful words wonderfully crafted piece I hope this sadness quickly passes. "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Corinne! I can always 'feel' your words! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and when the song is done. . . ? ah, but only you know don't you my friend? excellent writing here. . . superb emotion. . . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Vivid imagery emoted here. Very, very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Brian and Denise! Sven, when the song is done, another comes along to take it's place, I suppose. Or the responsibilities of life come flooding back, and push the emotions aside. A wise man once gave me his mantra: "cold, steely resolve, cold steely resolve." Thank you, Marge! Cor |
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