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in shadows of thy light
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in shadows of thy light |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
 in shadows of thy light intimate to one’s vision’s seek knowledge centers at a peak where light begins and shadows end would thou show me…gray in warmth, this gray, a show of shadows come to play a grope in dim, this want begins would thou show me…gray and in this shadow, thus undone simple thy lines yet left undone and in a moment, gifted this lifetime's breath undone speaking in the over and around and centering me I feel the pin this pinch of truth, that he would set me free to be undone in a moment's gift then he turns the lift and speaks over and around and centered me found never a moment floundering even in the gasp for his grasp so tender so dear so right held me in the long done of night and tho I seek to share this great grateful feel I am undone and left in light, unreal in shadows of thy light intimate to one’s visions’ seek knowledge centers at a peak where light begins and shadows end would thou show me…gray in warmth, this gray, a show of shadows come to play a grope in dim, this want begins would thou show me…gray and in the shadow of thy light, leave me undone [This message has been edited by Decaflame (edited 05-30-2001).] |
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ArticulatedSigh Junior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 26 |
What a fine and moving write. Internal seeking outward inspired by luminations epiphany thy new home enter to adorn For the moment swallows all things blinding our eyes to Heaven. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is VERY timely for me.....big *sigh* wow.....really like this one.....I need it in my library....  SEA |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
fabulous write....and write with words of art.....excellent piece. Charisma |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Moving, groping, probing and I think, coping. An excellent piece, Decaflame. Michael Proust- |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
Shadow of my light no longer gray but white hot at the very core. Our work has yet to be done but it has started the tender fire in our hearts and my love leaves you undone. Moonstruck |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I loved the verse, it left me completely "undone" |
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Death Member
since 2001-05-26
Posts 112Twilight |
While residing shadow like I cannot but be intrigued by light its clarity of being sustainer of life for once I was alive in light I remember inspired words the dark dwellers rememberance sired I have a friend who once said-"Sooner or later, Death makes a believer out of just about everyone." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love depth of these wonderful searching thoughts...it's a very interesting flow which seems to be broken in the proper places by the writer's thoughts. I love the idea of repeating this fab verse.... "intimate to one’s visions’ seek knowledge centers at a peak where light begins and shadows end would thou show me…gray" |
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Mendy Junior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 34 |
This is the smoothest, most evocative piece of work I've seen in a long time - since I read it a few hours ago my mind has been trying to work out the images and more than one scenerio unfolds - this is a pleasure in itself and I thank you. if it is true that the world talks toomuch then let us all keep quiet and hear the eloquence of silence - Richard Ntiru |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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RebeccaJoy Junior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 35 |
This is beautiful. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
This took my breath away ... Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
on your constructive critique you say... "say anything you wish" ... OK .... I wish I had wrote this  *leaves thread shaking head with poetic envy* I'm hanging on your every word |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
You are all so very, very kind with your comments to the new kid on the block...thank you so very much.... |
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