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Open Poetry #14

Doomed from the start

LittleCookie
Member

since 2000-06-28

Posts 55
asheville,NC,UnitedStates

0 posted 2001-05-29 01:53 AM

Take a page from love's book,
rip it out,
make me turn inside and shout,
how could I be so stupid thinking it could work,
i'm the one who turned out to be a jerk,
the seeds sown deeply into the sands of despair,
my insides raw,
why should I care?
Can I ever be free to find true love?
Is this what HE wants from above?
Answer me one thing:
Would it have been so bad?
to show our love for each other,
I didn't know you could make me this sad.
Why did you push me away?
When it comes to the heart,
you replied that you didn't want to leave,
it was doomed from the start.
In the end,
love is actually hate in disguise,
it just took me time to realize.

~~ To hell with it ~~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2001-05-29 05:36 AM

Powerful emotional write! Well done!

Welcome to Passions!

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

2 posted 2001-05-29 10:34 AM

This is filled full of pain. Very effective!! You have made it all so clear, beware of love.

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

3 posted 2001-05-29 08:03 PM

really liked this one it is very strong an emotion filled

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-05-29 08:21 PM

welcome to passions, you know another love could write an entirely different viewpoint.....but it hurts doesn't it?

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

LittleCookie
Member

since 2000-06-28

Posts 55
asheville,NC,UnitedStates

5 posted 2001-05-31 01:04 AM

**Thanks ethome, inot2B, watersign6,
& Irish Rose, i'm glad you liked it & hope you identify some

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