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a river flows
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a river flows |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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quickening of wings the paper chains in cling awash without/within echos scratch on vinyl skin place I know the sun don't shine but flowers grow and all the bees buzz harmony friends are shadow in the row every gesture ever made peace in me is unforgave everything I've ever known remembers me-- a river flows. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'm not sure where you're going with this one Celeste but I really like these lines..... "There's a secret place I know the sun don't shine but flowers grow and all the bees buzz harmony friends are shadow in the row every gesture ever made peace in me is unforgave everything I've ever known remembers me--" Great lines!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey E...this was just trying to describe that "Zen" moment---and naturally? I tried. So I did not succeed...lol...(if ya meet the buddha on the road? KILL HIM...) e me for details......rofl...thank you mon cherie amour! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Cocooning quickening of wings break the paper chains in cling Warmth awash without/within ======================== well ya already knew which lines mothy me would like  love the cascading presentation to create the feel of the water.  meI'm hanging on your every word |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yeah. . . Zen. . . that's it. . . like the sound of one hand clapping eh?? I get it. . .  ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
very very good |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
It flowed like a river ever leading onward in your thoughts. I liked it a lot. thank you so much. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
if you ever see the vinegar tasters painting there is a reason why Buddha is not smiling. The zen moment just is..... and I think you captured that pretty well. "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity--I like this muchly. Excellent writing, as always. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
thankyou for a lovely read. Kathleen Blake |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like. Zen moments are most extremely rare for me Sandra |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Just beautiful written. Titia Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100 |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i love your poetry, the way your words twine together from beging to end from the middle to the trim aroud the words, i love it, it always remindes me of something i wish i would have writen, i not like i wish i wrote likeyou but you know what i mean, i feeel its so strongly. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sweet Serenity You are flowing my dear! I enjoyed very much hon Maree |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked this |
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