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in the trust of dusk at needle point
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in the trust of dusk at needle point |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii 
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i just walk, transparent into the foggy blue, with a prayer of contentment and healing, my, my...., how time goes by, and i haven't felt a word, like finger wearing the clumsy thimble, i keep feeling the needle try with force to come in blood deep, but i remember that if i learn to use my thimble with trust in its protection, i will finally get my life quilt, pieced together. i know this to is kinda cheesy and stuff pretty wordy, i'm open to criticism, kinldy redheart Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids [This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
CHEESE? only with finest wine m'luv! This is incredibly lovely...my I love the play of thought in your mind...like silkworms spinning...you, my dear friend, are a remarkable poet! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RedHeartAngryBraids~ 'my, my...., how time goes by, and i haven't felt a word' Well ... you have made ME feel your words, sweet little poet ! This is just magnificient emotion ... at it's finest. I collect thimbles and you have certainly given me a new perspective on them. I'm printing this little jewel out to place in one of my thimble cases.  Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
lovely poem..enjoyed very much  ~Victoria~
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
thankyou all so much, just like a breath of fresh air you all make be feel so good, i will read and comment when i return from work, Kindly, |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
Redheart Angrybreads..i think it is very very good,i will go read more of yours now |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~RedHeart,...the title itself is pure poetry. That line can take me soaring. This piece is inside somehow and stirring softly. Thank you for sharing it and you. *Peace. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
poetic indeed....I felt the words line by line....thanks.. Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Didn't see anything cheesy here. This is the first of yours I've read and I look forward to more. I enjoyed the style. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is excellent work, My regards, Sudhir |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
great metaphor, cheese with a fine wine I would say! Well done! Kathleen Blake |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
cheesy???gosh i aspire to write like you some day...i love the way your wacky mind works and hope that i may write, letting my mind's thoughts go unrestrained... this is a keeper... |
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