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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Tide washed The tide haunts me with her every arrival moment after moment foaming memories to the shore stolen with selfishness busily my fingers comb the coolness of isolated sand once warm once alive captured and etched with loving tide washed our mark threatened too deep I suppose for the shallowness of the shore and we ran a rivulet into the sea lost and surrendered in the arms of jealousy Angel of Darkness 28/5/01 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
to the shore stolen with selfishness busily my fingers comb the coolness of isolated sand once warm once alive captured and etched with loving ====================== and we ran a rivulet into the sea lost and surrendered in the arms of jealousy ================== superb imagery and use of metaphor here DA you have some great phrases and elemental comparisons in this bittersweet write. well done poetess angel  I'm hanging on your every word |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
enjoyed it all but those last lines? Sheer heaven. Kathleen Blake |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Love it, yes, yes, yes, Titia |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful piece...overall it was wonderful but the last verses was amazing...this was a very well writtin one...i really liked it and thanks for sharing it  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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pamela08 Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 27California,USA |
fascinating use of words....great poem over all true beauty comes from within not from without |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! Maree this is incredible!! I love it.  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey - but I still have the photos with the writing - several of them!!! So, really..it can't be taken away hon...lol... You m'friend, did a damn good job here...you really have...have I mentioned lately that I'm really proud of you? Hugs and loves  K |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great write, Maree...so glad to read one of your poems again! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
really enjoyed your poem,very good indeed |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
our mark threatened too deep I suppose for the shallowness of the shore Impressive! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
and we ran a rivulet into the sea lost and surrendered in the arms of jealousy speechless WOW "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
JM, I thank you so vry much for your lovely reply, I do appreciate it so Kathleen, thank you so much, glad you enjoyed Titia, Girl, I'll have what you're having!!!! Gald you loved it Albert, glad you liked it, thanks for stopping by and having a read Pamela, I thank you so much Sharon, thank you so much hon Glad you loved it SB, yes I have them too you are really proud of me? Yes hon you just did, mention it to me hehehe, just now lol Thanks so much hon Mmy Hi Martie Thank you for stopping by. Watersign6, I thank you JLR, happy to have impressed you! Thank you. Brian, it's quite a compliment if my poem has you speechless I thank you |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Maree This was absolutely beautiful, I loved it. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so full of sadness, I feel that lonliness. (or is that just my reading of this?) I love the ocean, and have spent so many days and nights with this feeling, while gazing out at the water. Hm, I appear to be babbling, sorry. This one touched me greatly. Sandra |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
the tide may be able to wash away etchings in the sand-- but the words remain, as this beautiful poem demonstrates..... love it MM There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o yuh love this alotI am gonna go wash some clothes with Tide |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Yuh Walt.. it is much better than Surf! You are a funny guy! There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Most excellent... Maree, My regards, sudhir |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Woohoo! I love it!  What spectacular imagery! <*\\\>< |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Pleased to have visited. And thankful for the words I have read. The ending cuts deep. And your words have always impressed me. - Please know that I am thankful for all the recent visits and comments from you.  Truly. *Peace. |
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furlong Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 129 |
somehow DA the sound reminds me of the sea, this was well written it took me back F |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
ahh, DA, you have brought me back to the love of my life, the sea, with smiling memories of beaches here and there..thank you for this...gentle smile |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Suetang, Thanks so much for your lovely reply Catalinamoon, I am so glad my poem touched you and you may babble with me anytime Jamie, thanks for you lovely reply but, words do not always remain m'friend.Walty, Tide?, I think Surf is better heheh...Thank you Dear, glad you liked Jamie, nahhh Surf is better than Tide lol, he is a funny guy isnt he? Sudi, I thank you very much Hey Angel I thank you for your lovely reply hon Many Hugs! Spitfire, I thank you for stopping by and having a read and for your lovely reply. I only wished that I had not missed reading you. Furlong, glad my poem was able to take you back I am glad you liked it. I thank you.Logan you are most welcome, glad to have taken you back. I thank you for your lovely reply. I'd like to thank everyone for stopping by and takiung the time to read and for your wonderful replies. I do appreciate them so Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-31-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
quote: sure they do dear,,, once they have been read they are a part of you. of course that is just my opinion...heh love ya hon There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
"of course that is just my opinion...heh" Indeed it is Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Maree~ I'm sorry that I haven't seen this before now! Incredible imagery, I loved "and we ran a rivulet into the sea lost and surrendered in the arms of jealousy" Truly thoughtful and deep writing, my friend, excellent.  *Krista Knutson* |
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